自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitations (uh, MMM) and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words like “and” or “so” to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 sentences and include a brief descriptive detail or short anecdote.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that I rode every afternoon with my sister, and we often raced along the park path. It was a lot of fun and helped me become more confident on the road.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer grammar and linking words. Start with a concise opinion sentence, then give specific supporting reasons (for example: bike lanes, cost, environment). Avoid fragments and filler sounds. Use connectors such as “because”, “for example” and “therefore” to make your reasoning coherent. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many cities now have dedicated bike lanes. For example, in my province the new bike paths make cycling safer and more convenient, so more people choose bikes for short trips.

× Yes, I have. I have a bike, uh, when I was a child and I always play with my sister. MMM.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child and I always played with my sister.

The question asked about the past (when you were a child), so past tense is required. 'Yes, I have' is present and should be 'Yes, I did' as a short answer to 'Did you have...'. 'I have a bike when I was a child' mixes present 'have' with past time reference; change to past 'I had a bike'. 'I always play' should be past 'I always played'. Suggestion: For past experiences, use past simple (did/had/played).

× Of course, yes uh, because, uh, in my province, uh, that, uh, have, uh, good lines for, uh, bikers in the road, so, uh, they can bike, uh, so safety and.

✓ Of course. In my province there are good bike lanes on the roads, so cyclists can ride safely.

The original sentence has disfluent filler words and incorrect structure. 'That have' is incorrect relative-clause usage; use 'there are' to introduce existence (there be issue). 'Good lines for bikers in the road' is unnatural; use 'good bike lanes on the roads'. 'They can bike' is acceptable but 'cyclists can ride' is more natural. 'So safety and' is incomplete; replace with 'so cyclists can ride safely' to express purpose/result. Suggestion: Remove fillers, use 'there are' to state existence, choose natural noun phrases (bike lanes), and finish the result clause with an adverb (safely).