自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on grammar (past tense, articles), sentence structure, and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'color pink').

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small, pink bicycle which my parents bought me for my seventh birthday. I loved it because it was light and easy to ride, so I often rode it to the park with my friends.

建議: Use correct verbs and plural forms, and give specific reasons with linking words. Begin with a direct opinion, then explain with 1–2 concrete examples and a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'. Keep sentences natural and avoid vague phrasing.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in the Philippines. For example, many children ride them after school to visit friends and play, and some people also cycle to nearby rural areas or mountains for exercise and sightseeing.

× When I was a child, I have a bike which very beautiful.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike which was very beautiful.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child') so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present; change to 'had'. Also add the past form 'was' to link the subject to the adjective 'very beautiful'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for events in the past (had, was).

× The color of the bike is color pink because color pink is my favorite color.

✓ The color of the bike was pink because pink was my favorite color.

This repeats the noun 'color' unnecessarily and mixes present tense with a past time frame. Use the adjective 'pink' to describe the color, and match tense to the past ('was'). Suggestion: avoid redundant words and keep tense consistent: 'The color of the bike was pink.'

× When I was a child that bike, my parents gave me that bike when I had a birthday.

✓ When I was a child, my parents gave me that bike for my birthday.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant. 'When I had a birthday' is awkward; the usual expression is 'for my birthday'. Also remove the extraneous phrase 'that bike' after the subordinate clause. Suggestion: simplify the sentence and use the common collocation 'for my birthday.'

× Yes, bike is very popular in the Philippines because the children love to use this specially when they come home from the school.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines because children love to use them, especially when they come home from school.

Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally; match verb agreement 'are'. 'The children' is unnecessarily specific, use 'children'. 'This' should be 'them' to refer back to 'bikes'. 'Specially' is incorrect; use 'especially'. Also omit the definite article before 'school' in this general context. Suggestion: use plural count noun with plural verb, use correct pronoun reference, and use 'especially' and no article before 'school.'

× They enjoyed it riding in the streets, going to the mountains using this bike.

✓ They enjoyed riding in the streets and going to the mountains on their bikes.

After 'enjoyed' use the gerund 'riding' directly; 'enjoyed it riding' is incorrect. Use parallel structure 'riding ... and going ...'. Use 'on their bikes' rather than 'using this bike' to be natural and consistent with plural subject. Suggestion: use gerund after 'enjoy' and maintain parallelism and correct preposition 'on' for riding a bike.