自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar, and provide a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use correct verb forms (e.g. 'couldn't afford', 'I usually took the bus'). Replace unclear phrase 'go to buy the bus' with 'take the bus'. Add a linking word to connect ideas (e.g. 'so' or 'therefore').

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike because my family couldn’t afford one. Therefore, I usually took the bus or sometimes walked to school, which helped me get exercise.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give specific reasons with correct vocabulary and linking words. Use accurate verbs and collocations (e.g. 'technology has advanced', 'use various types of transport', 'bikes are used for short trips'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'burn place to another place'.

範例: I think bikes are moderately popular. Although technology has advanced and many people use cars for safety and convenience, some people still ride bikes for short journeys or commuting in busy cities because they are cheap and faster in traffic.

× No, I did not have a bike because my family could not afford 1.

✓ No, I did not have a bike because my family could not afford one.

The sentence uses a numeral '1' instead of the word 'one', which is incorrect in this context. Use the word 'one' as the object of 'afford'. Also the past tense 'did not have' and 'could not afford' are correct for a past situation so no tense change is needed. Suggestion: Replace digits with words in simple sentences and keep past tense verbs as they are to match the time frame.

× So I usually go to buy the bus and sometime I walk.

✓ So I usually took the bus, and sometimes I walked.

The original mixes present simple ('usually go') with a past context; the speaking context asks about childhood, so past tense should be used. 'Go to buy the bus' is ungrammatical; the correct phrase is 'take the bus'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Suggestion: Use appropriate past tense verbs ('took', 'walked') to match 'when you were a child' and use correct collocations ('take the bus').

× Well, technology arise here, most of the people use many transports, some people use the bikes to go easily burn place to another place and mostly people now use the cars because cars is safe.

✓ Well, technology has arisen here; most people use various forms of transport. Some people use bikes to travel easily from one place to another, but most people now use cars because cars are safer.

Multiple issues: tense and verb form ('arise' should be present perfect 'has arisen' to indicate change up to now), word choice ('many transports' should be 'various forms of transport'), article and preposition errors ('use the bikes' -> 'use bikes'; 'from one place to another'), incorrect word 'burn' likely intended 'from', and subject-verb agreement ('cars is' -> 'cars are'). Also 'safer' is comparative and appropriate when comparing cars to other options. Suggestion: Use present perfect to describe changes over time ('has arisen'), correct collocations ('forms of transport', 'from one place to another'), remove unnecessary articles before plural nouns, and ensure subject-verb agreement ('cars are').