自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid self-corrections and filler words. Use correct tense (past) and simple linking words (e.g., "but", "and", "so") to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: I didn’t own my own bike as a child, but I often used a neighbour’s bicycle. I rode it after school to my tuition classes and around my neighbourhood, so it was an important part of my daily routine.

建議: Give a clear opinion then support it with two specific reasons and an example. Use correct grammar and more natural vocabulary (e.g., "bicycles" plural, "cost-effective", "low maintenance"). Avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like "because", "therefore", or "for example" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people cycle to work or school since maintenance costs are low, and they don’t need fuel, so bicycles are a cost-effective way to travel.

× No, I don't have a boy.

✓ No, I didn't.

The student used 'boy' incorrectly instead of a past-tense response. The question asked about having a bike in childhood, so the correct reply is negative past tense 'I didn't' or 'I didn't have one.' Use the appropriate pronoun/phrase referring to the object (bike) or the auxiliary in past tense.

× No I do not have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The question asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Do not have' is present tense; change to 'didn't have' to match the time frame.

× But and I had a bicycle that I used a lot when I was a child.

✓ But I had a bicycle that I used a lot when I was a child.

Using both 'but' and 'and' together is redundant and incorrect. Choose one conjunction that fits the contrast ('but') and remove the other.

× I would ride after school and off run, cycle to my tuition.

✓ I would ride my bicycle after school and cycle to my tuition classes.

The original has misplaced words ('off run') and missing object for 'ride.' Use 'ride my bicycle' and 'cycle to my tuition classes' for clear, correct verb-object structure. 'Would' is acceptable for habitual past actions.

× Classes are around my neighborhood in my free time.

✓ My tuition classes were around my neighborhood, and I went there in my free time.

Tense should be past ('were') to match childhood timeframe, and sentence structure needs reordering to convey meaning: that classes were located nearby and the student attended them during free time.

× Yeah, I think it's quite popular.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear; refer to 'bikes' (plural). Use present tense 'are' for general statements about popularity.

× We use bicycle because it's popular and cheap and convenient to us.

✓ We use bicycles because they are popular, cheap, and convenient for us.

Use plural 'bicycles' to match generalization, and 'for us' is the correct preposition. Also use plural verb agreement 'they are' and add commas to separate adjectives.

× We spend one time money on them when we buy.

✓ We spend money on them only once when we buy them.

The phrase 'one time money' is incorrect. Use 'only once' to indicate a single payment at purchase. Also repeat 'them' for clarity or use 'a bike' singular consistently.

× After that there is.

✓ After that, there is little or no additional cost.

The original is incomplete; it lacks an object and predicate. Complete the sentence to express the intended meaning that after purchase there are minimal ongoing costs.