自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (past tense and articles), make sentences concise and within 3–4 sentences, and add a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., “and”, “because”, “then”) correctly and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. I had two bikes when I was a child. The first was a pink Japanese bike my father bought me, and it was my favorite because it was my first gift. Later, I got a black bike in high school.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “in Cambodia”, “motorbikes”), and give a specific reason and brief example. Use linking words like “because” and “however” to connect ideas and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not really. In Cambodia, especially in rural areas, people prefer motorbikes to bicycles because distances are long and roads are uneven. However, bicycles are more common in some cities among people who want exercise or save money.

× When I was a child, I have two bike and the first bike that I used to have was bought by my father.

✓ When I was a child, I had two bikes, and the first bike I had was bought by my father.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. Use past tense 'had' for possession in the past. Also 'two bike' is plural error (see singular/plural). Remove redundant 'used to' when 'was' or 'had' already indicates past. Suggested improvement: maintain past tense consistently: 'When I was a child, I had two bikes.'

× When I was a child, I have two bike and the first bike that I used to have was bought by my father.

✓ When I was a child, I had two bikes, and the first bike I had was bought by my father.

The noun 'bike' should be plural when referring to 'two'. Use 'bikes'. Also 'two bike' is ungrammatical. Ensure noun number matches the numeral: 'two bikes'.

× It's a pink bike made in Japan.

✓ It was a pink bike made in Japan.

The context is past narration, so the verb should be past tense 'was' rather than 'is'. The article 'a' is correct. Maintain past tense consistency with surrounding sentences.

× It's actually the my favorite bike because it is the first gift that I got and the second one is the black one that I got in high school.

✓ It was actually my favorite bike because it was the first gift I received, and the second one was a black bike that I got in high school.

Mixes present and past; narration about childhood should use past tense ('was', 'received', 'got'). Also remove extra 'the' before 'my favorite bike' and use 'a black bike' for natural phrasing. 'Received' is a more appropriate verb than repeated 'got'.

× Well, as the civilizations of Cambodian, bike doesn't really exist much in my country, especially my local place, we often ride a motorbike instead of a bicycle to every places because quite far from the place where I lived.

✓ Well, in Cambodia bicycles are not very common, especially in my local area; we often ride motorbikes instead of bicycles to get to places because they are quite far from where I lived.

Multiple issues: 'as the civilizations of Cambodian' is incorrect phrasing — use 'in Cambodia'. Subject-verb agreement: 'bike doesn't really exist much' is wrong; use plural 'bicycles are not very common'. 'Every places' should be 'places' or 'every place'; 'quite far from the place where I lived' needs 'they are quite far from where I lived' for clarity. Break into clearer clauses and keep past context for 'lived'.

× we often ride a motorbike instead of a bicycle to every places because quite far from the place where I lived.

✓ We often ride motorbikes instead of bicycles to get to places because they are quite far from where I lived.

Incorrect preposition and article use: 'to every places' should be 'to places' or 'to every place'. Also add 'get to' for movement and ensure 'they are quite far from where I lived' clarifies subject. Use plural 'motorbikes' to match general statement.