自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "I didn't" twice) and correct tense and article use ("a helmet" not "my helmets"). Also keep within 3–4 sentences for Part 1.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. I had an accident during a cycling lesson when I hit a rock because I wasn't wearing a helmet, which made me afraid of cycling. As a result, I usually used public transport instead of riding a bike.

建議: Start with a clear opinion sentence and then give one or two specific reasons, using linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "therefore"). Avoid vague or repetitive phrases like "pretty popular" and double words "if if". Use clearer vocabulary ("crowded" or "narrow") and more natural phrasing.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular in China and Hong Kong. This is because many streets are narrow and prioritised for cars, making cycling unsafe and impractical. Therefore most people prefer public transport or driving.

× I didn't own a bike when I was a child because I once had an accident during a cycling lesson.

✓ I didn't own a bike when I was a child because I once had an accident during a cycling lesson.

No change needed: sentence correctly uses past simple for a past state (didn't own) and a past event (had an accident).

× I didn't wear my helmets and I tripped over a small rock on the road.

✓ I didn't wear my helmet and I tripped over a small rock on the road.

Use singular helmet when referring to the one helmet you were supposed to wear. Use of plural 'helmets' is incorrect here because the context implies a single helmet. Suggestion: use 'my helmet' for clarity.

× Ever since then, I had a lasting fear about cycling, so I usually took the public transport instead of cycling.

✓ Ever since then, I have had a lasting fear of cycling, so I usually took public transport instead of cycling.

The phrase 'Ever since then' indicates a state that started in the past and continues to the present; use present perfect 'have had' rather than simple past 'had'. Also use 'fear of cycling' (preposition correction) and 'public transport' without 'the' in general statements. Note: 'I usually took' mixes tenses; if describing habitual past behavior after the accident, 'I usually took public transport' is fine, but to convey ongoing habit use 'I usually take public transport'. Choose tense to match intended meaning.

× I don't think bikes are pretty popular in China and Hong Kong because the roads are pretty tight and narrow where it is usually for cars to use and not for us cyclists.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in China and Hong Kong because the roads are quite tight and narrow and are usually meant for cars, not for cyclists.

Replace informal 'pretty popular' with 'very popular' or 'quite popular' for formality and clarity. 'Where it is usually for cars to use' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'are usually meant for cars'. Also 'not for us cyclists' is acceptable but 'not for cyclists' is more natural. 'Quite' or 'very' corrects adverb/adjective usage.

× So if if bikes are actually pretty prevalent, it will accumulate a majority of the road.

✓ So if bikes were actually very prevalent, they would take up most of the road.

Remove repeated 'if'. Use correct conditional: 'if bikes were... they would...' instead of 'it will accumulate'. 'Accumulate a majority of the road' is unnatural; use 'take up most of the road'. Also match plural subject 'bikes' with plural pronoun 'they' and use appropriate conditional tense.

× Therefore I don't think it is pretty popular.

✓ Therefore I don't think they are very popular.

Refer back to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they are' not 'it is'. Replace informal 'pretty popular' with 'very popular' or 'quite popular' for clarity. This corrects subject-pronoun agreement and word choice.