自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with accuracy, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific details. Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., "I had a bike when I was in primary school"). Avoid unnecessary words and keep sentences varied but concise. Link ideas with simple connectors (for example, "I used it to..." or "I rode it with...").

範例: Yes — I had a small pink bike when I was in primary school. I used it to ride to school every day with a classmate, which saved time and felt fun. Because the bike was light and easy to handle, I could weave through quiet streets quickly.

建議: Give a clear direct opinion then support it with two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "electric scooters" not "electronic schooler") and correct tenses. Organize into one topic sentence and one or two supporting sentences using connectors such as "because" or "however". Mention concrete examples or consequences to make your answer persuasive.

範例: I think bikes used to be very popular in my country, but they are less common now. This is mainly because many people now choose electric scooters and cars for convenience, and because increasing traffic and safety concerns make cycling less attractive. As a result, fewer parents allow children to cycle on busy roads.

× Yes, I had a bag when I was primary school student.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a primary school student.

The sentence has an article error and a wrong noun. 'primary school student' needs the indefinite article 'a'. Also the student said 'bag' instead of 'bike' which contradicts the question; likely a lexical mistake rather than grammar, so correct to 'a bike'. Use 'a' before singular countable nouns that are mentioned for the first time: 'a primary school student'.

× I always ride by this bike to school with my classmate.

✓ I always rode this bike to school with my classmates.

Tense and number errors: The context is past ('when you were a child'), so use past tense 'rode' not present 'ride'. Preposition 'by' is incorrect here; native usage is 'rode a bike' or 'rode to school'. Also 'classmate' should be plural 'classmates' if referring to more than one; keep number consistent. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for past context and match noun number.

× Yes, bike used to be very popular, but now they become less common because more people prefer to use electronic schooler.

✓ Yes, bikes used to be very popular, but now they have become less common because more people prefer to use electric scooters.

Multiple issues: plural form needed 'bikes' and the idiom is 'used to be'. 'they become' should be 'they have become' or 'they are becoming'; 'have become' fits the change over time. 'electronic schooler' is incorrect word choice; correct term is 'electric scooters'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct nouns.

× Riding back become has has become more danger in my city and because and it will have more traffic problem.

✓ Riding back has become more dangerous in my city and there are more traffic problems.

This sentence has tense, word order and adjective/adverb errors. Use present perfect 'has become' to describe a recent change. 'More danger' is incorrect; use the adjective 'more dangerous'. Remove duplicate words 'has has' and the extra 'and because'. For 'more traffic problem' use plural 'traffic problems' and a clearer connector: 'and there are more traffic problems.'