自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and directly responds to the question, with relevant personal details. To improve, make the structure clearer by starting with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repeating the same time reference twice ("when I was a child" and "when I was 3"). Also try to vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., use "learned" instead of "taught" if appropriate) and keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small bike when I was three, and my grandfather taught me to balance and pedal. As a result, I became confident riding around the neighborhood by the time I was five.

建議: You answer the question and give reasons, which is good. To improve coherence and naturalness, begin with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (e.g., "however", "because") to connect your reason. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "infrastructure" instead of "roads for the bike riders"; "motor vehicles" instead of "machines"). Reduce repetition and avoid vague phrases like "probably I would say" — be more confident. Aim for 3–4 sentences maximum.

範例: I think bikes are fairly popular among children, but not widely used by adults. However, this is mainly because our country lacks cycling infrastructure; most roads are designed for motor vehicles. As a result, many adults prefer cars or motorcycles for safety and convenience.

× My dad bought me a bike when I was 3 and my grandpa taught me how to ride it.

✓ My dad bought me a bike when I was three, and my grandpa taught me how to ride it.

Numbers from one to nine are usually written as words in formal writing; also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses for correct punctuation. This is a style/grammar clarity improvement in past-tense narrative.

× Among children, probably I would say yes, but between adults bikes are not popular because in my country there is no roads for the bike riders.

✓ Among children, I would probably say yes, but among adults bikes are not popular because in my country there are no roads for bike riders.

Use 'among' (not 'between') for groups rather than 'between'. Move 'probably' to follow the subject for more natural word order. 'There is no roads' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and article use; use plural 'there are no roads'. Also remove the definite article before 'bike riders' to be general: 'for bike riders'. These changes correct preposition, word order and agreement errors.

× There are only roads for the machines, not for bikes.

✓ There are only roads for motor vehicles, not for bikes.

'The machines' is vague and unnatural; use 'motor vehicles' to refer to cars and similar vehicles. Also keep 'for bikes' as contrast. This corrects word choice and prepositional clarity.

× That's why it's not that popular.

✓ That's why they are not that popular.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear because the subject 'bikes' is plural. Replace 'it' with 'they' to match plural subject and use present tense 'are' for current general statement. This fixes pronoun reference and subject-verb agreement.