自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific supporting detail using linking words. Correct tenses and word choice (e.g. 'let' not 'live', 'depending on the distance' rather than 'depends the kilometer'). Avoid repetitions like 'it's actually it's'.

範例: I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child because my parents were worried about safety. Instead, I usually walked to school or took public transport. For shorter distances I walked, but for places more than a couple of kilometers away I used buses.

建議: Give a clear opinion then support it with a specific reason and example. Use linking words (for example, because, however). Avoid unclear phrases and hesitations; be specific about laws, infrastructure, or culture to justify your view.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because there are few bike lanes and traffic laws do not protect cyclists. For example, last year the government considered a law to improve cycling safety, but it hasn’t been implemented nationwide, so many people still prefer cars or buses.

× When I was a child I didn't have a bicycle because my parents didn't live it for my safety reasons.

✓ When I was a child I didn't have a bicycle because my parents didn't allow it for safety reasons.

ID 27 and 26: The original uses 'didn't live it' which is incorrect verb choice and causes sentence structure problems. The intended meaning is that parents did not permit a bicycle, so the correct verb is 'allow' in the past simple ('didn't allow'). Also 'for my safety reasons' is awkward; use 'for safety reasons' or 'for my safety'. Suggestion: use 'didn't allow it' and 'for safety reasons' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× Instead I usually walk to school or use the public transport.

✓ Instead I usually walked to school or used public transport.

ID 6 and 5: The interviewer asked about childhood (past). The student mixed present simple 'usually walk' and 'use' with a past-time context. Change to past simple 'walked' and 'used' to match the past timeframe. Also 'public transport' is uncountable, so drop 'the' or keep 'the' depending on dialect; 'used public transport' is natural.

× It's actually it's depends the kilometer to school or anywhere.

✓ It actually depends on the distance to school or to other places.

ID 26 and 11: The original has incorrect order 'it's actually it's depends the kilometer' and missing preposition. Use simple 'It depends on' plus a noun phrase. Replace 'kilometer' with 'distance' and add 'on' after 'depends'. Also 'anywhere' is vague; 'other places' is clearer.

× I don't think so, because in my country the bicycle law is approached everywhere and last year before, after last year, it's uh.

✓ I don't think so, because in my country there are few bicycle lanes and the law is not enforced everywhere; also, last year some changes were proposed.

ID 3, 21 and 26: The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical: 'the bicycle law is approached everywhere' is incorrect verb use and structure. If the intended meaning is that laws or infrastructure are lacking or not enforced, say 'there are few bicycle lanes' or 'the law is not enforced everywhere.' The phrase 'last year before, after last year, it's uh' is incomplete; provide a clear past-tense statement such as 'last year some changes were proposed.' Ensure tense consistency and complete the idea.