自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve naturalness and specificity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (where, how often, what you enjoyed) using a linking word. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and avoid vague phrases like "very famous activity."

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. In fact, I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood after school, and I often went to the park with friends. Because the streets were quiet, I felt confident learning new tricks, which made riding very enjoyable.

建議: Make the opinion clearer and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Replace vague word choices like "proper" with clearer terms (e.g., "common" or "practical") and give brief evidence (traffic, infrastructure, culture). Keep it natural and concise.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for daily commuting. For example, heavy traffic and limited bike lanes make cycling less convenient and less safe for many commuters.

× That was very famous activity among youngsters of my age.

✓ That was a very popular activity among youngsters my age.

The adjective 'famous' is usually used for people, places, or works known widely; 'popular' is the correct adjective for activities that many people like. Also, the sentence needs the article 'a' before 'very popular activity' and 'of' before 'my age' is unnecessary and unnatural in this context; 'youngsters my age' is the natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'popular' for activities and include the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns.

× To be honest, I don't think that bikes are proper in my country because the main vehicle and main transport is a car.

✓ To be honest, I don't think bikes are practical in my country because the main vehicle and main means of transport are cars.

'Proper' is not the best adjective here; 'practical' or 'popular' fits context. There is also a subject-verb agreement issue with 'the main vehicle and main transport is a car' because the compound subject refers to more than one concept and the intended meaning is general: 'cars' (plural). Change 'is a car' to 'are cars' or rephrase to 'the main means of transport is the car.' Also 'main transport' is unidiomatic; 'means of transport' is correct. Suggestions: use 'practical' or 'popular', correct the noun phrase to 'means of transport', and ensure verb agrees with the subject.