自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I did), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tense (use past tense) and avoid hesitation sounds. For example, mention the bike's appearance, who gave it to you, and a short memory or why you liked it.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me for my tenth birthday, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. It was lightweight and easy to control, which helped me feel more confident learning to ride.

建議: Answer directly and provide organized supporting details with linking words. Use correct noun forms and sentence structure, and give specific examples of who uses bikes and why. Avoid filler words and repeat the key points clearly in 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many children cycle to school, and adults often ride for commuting or exercise. Additionally, community bike lanes have made cycling safer and more common among older people.

× Uh, yes, I have a beautiful by when I was shy.

✓ Uh, yes, I had a beautiful bike when I was a child.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was...'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' (present) is incorrect; use 'had'. Also 'by' is a spelling error for 'bike' and 'shy' should be 'child'. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference and check word choice and spelling.

× Uh, that's a specific other 10 variety that my parents, uh, give to me and it is very, uh, umm.

✓ Uh, it was a specific model that my parents gave me, and it was very nice.

The original has unclear structure and incorrect tense and word choice. 'That's' (present) should be past 'it was' to match past context. 'Other 10 variety' is incorrect phrase; 'a specific model' or 'a specific variety' is appropriate. 'Give to me' is awkward; use past tense 'gave me'. Replace vague 'very, umm' with an adjective like 'very nice'. Suggestion: simplify the noun phrase, use past tense consistently, and use natural verb forms.

× Examiner: Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: Uh, yes. By very popular in my country, uh, it is, uh, used, uh, for children, you go to the school and it's useful for older people to, uh, exercise.

✓ Uh, yes. Bikes are very popular in my country. They are used by children to go to school, and they are useful for older people to exercise.

Several problems: 'By' is a spelling error for 'Bikes' or mis-typed; sentence structure and verb forms are inconsistent. Use present tense 'are' because the question asks about general present facts. Use plural subject 'they' to refer to bikes. Use 'used by children to go to school' (correct preposition and infinitive purpose) and 'useful for older people to exercise' is acceptable but clearer as 'useful for older people to exercise'. Suggestion: keep present tense for general facts, use correct prepositions ('by' for passive), maintain subject-verb agreement, and remove filler words.