自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more fluent, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word order errors, avoid redundancies, and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a pink bicycle my mother surprised me with after school one day, and I remember feeling really happy. I rode it around my neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me make friends and feel more independent.

建議: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct basic grammar (e.g., plural nouns, verbs). Keep it concise and coherent.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Mainly, most people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient for long distances. For example, in my city many commuters ride motorbikes to work, so you rarely see people cycling on main roads.

× All well as I remember it was a pink bike that at that time after I returned home from school, I suddenly know that my mom already bought me that and it was made me really happy.

✓ As well as I remember, it was a pink bike; at that time, after I returned home from school, I suddenly found out that my mom had already bought it for me, and it made me really happy.

Multiple issues involve verb forms and tense sequence. 'suddenly know' is incorrect: the action of realizing in the past requires past tense 'found out' (Verb + -ing form category includes incorrect non-inflected verb forms). 'already bought me that' should use past perfect 'had already bought' to show the purchase occurred before the moment of finding out. 'it was made me really happy' is ungrammatical: use simple past 'it made me really happy.' Also improved word order and pronouns: 'bought it for me' is natural. Suggestion: use past simple and past perfect appropriately to show sequence of past events and use correct verb forms.

× Well, I don't think bike is popular in my country as uh, there's really uh like a small number of people riding bike out St.

✓ Well, I don't think bicycles are popular in my country, as there are only a small number of people riding bikes on the streets.

This sentence has singular/plural mismatches. 'bike' should be plural 'bicycles' or 'bikes' to match general reference. 'a small number of people' requires plural verb 'are' not 'is'; the original used 'there's' (there is). Also 'riding bike' should be 'riding bikes' and 'out St.' appears to be 'on the streets.' Suggestion: use plural nouns and match verbs for general statements: 'bicycles are' or 'there are a small number of people riding bikes on the streets.'

× Instead they often Dr. motorbike or drive car to work or go to school.

✓ Instead, they often ride motorbikes or drive cars to work or go to school.

Verb form errors and incorrect verb choices: 'Dr.' is not a verb; correct verb is 'ride.' Use the plural forms 'motorbikes' and 'cars' for general statements. Present simple is appropriate for habitual actions: 'they often ride motorbikes or drive cars.' Suggestion: use correct verbs ('ride') and plural nouns when speaking generally.