自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a direct topic sentence, e.g. “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.” Then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary fillers. For example, mention who had a bike, when you first tried riding, and how you felt, with linking words like “however” or “because.”

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My brother owned one, so I only learned to ride on his bike about five years ago. At first I found it stressful because I was nervous about balancing, but after practicing a few times I became more confident.

建議: Make the response more concise and organize ideas with linking words. Begin with a clear opinion: “Not very popular.” Then give 2 specific reasons with linking phrases like “mainly because” and “for example.” Avoid repetition (e.g. “prefer to prefer”) and finish with a brief comparison. Include specific contexts such as commuting or city infrastructure.

範例: Not very popular. Mainly because public buses are the preferred mode of transport for commuting, especially in cities where cycling lanes are limited. For example, most people take buses to work or school since they are more convenient and faster than cycling in heavy traffic.

× No, I had.

✓ No, I didn't.

The student used 'I had' which is simple past affirmative but the intended meaning is to say they did not have a bike. In English, negation in simple past uses auxiliary did not + base verb. Use 'I didn't' or 'I didn't have' rather than 'I had.' Suggestion: say 'No, I didn't' or 'No, I didn't have a bike.'

× I had not a bike when I was a child, but but my brother had one.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my brother had one.

The sentence uses 'I had not a bike' which is an incorrect negation in simple past. English requires 'did not' + base verb for past negation: 'didn't have.' Also remove duplicate 'but'. Suggestion: use 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my brother had one.'

× That's I think probably five years ago when I tried to ride a bike.

✓ I think it was probably about five years ago when I tried to ride a bike.

Word order and structure are awkward. 'That's I think probably five years ago' mixes contractions and adverb placement incorrectly. For past reference use 'I think it was probably about five years ago.' Place comment verbs ('I think') at start, use 'it was' for a past time reference, and include 'about' for approximation. Suggestion: 'I think it was probably about five years ago when I tried to ride a bike.'

× But it's really stressful for me for the beginning.

✓ But it was really stressful for me at the beginning.

Tense mismatch and preposition choice. The student refers to a past experience so use past tense 'was' not 'it's.' Use the phrase 'at the beginning' rather than 'for the beginning.' Suggestion: 'But it was really stressful for me at the beginning.'

× Umm I think it's not that popular in my country because buses are more common in my country than the cars as well because more people prefer to prefer to go to work or school with the bus instead of bike or.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because buses are more common than cars, and many people prefer to go to work or school by bus rather than by bike.

Multiple problems: incorrect negation and tense/wording ('I think it's not that popular' is awkward; use 'I don't think bikes are very popular'), redundancy ('prefer to prefer'), article use ('by bus' and 'by bike' need preposition 'by'), and extra conjunctions/words at end. Also compare 'more common than cars' without 'the.' Suggestion: simplify and correct to 'I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because buses are more common than cars, and many people prefer to go to work or school by bus rather than by bike.'