自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện độ mạch lạc và ngữ pháp: tránh lặp từ, dùng thì đúng (past simple), sửa cấu trúc câu để trả lời trực tiếp. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể nhưng không quá dài (tối đa 5 câu). Ví dụ: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu có/không rồi mô tả món quà, cảm xúc và một chi tiết kèm liên từ để mạch lạc.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bicycle as a birthday present when I was eight, and I was really surprised. I used to ride it every afternoon near my house, which helped me become more confident and independent. It was bright red and had a small basket, so I could carry my books when I went to a friend’s house.

建議: Cải thiện phát âm/viết và tổ chức ý: sửa lỗi từ (bike), dùng cấu trúc so sánh đúng, và dùng liên từ để liên kết ý (for example, because, however). Cung cấp thông tin cụ thể (những loại phương tiện phổ biến, lý do chi tiết). Giữ tối đa 5 câu và tránh câu dang dở.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country anymore because most people prefer motorbikes and cars. For example, motorbikes are faster and more convenient for crowded streets, and public buses are cheap for long distances. As a result, many people choose these alternatives instead of cycling, although bicycles are still used for leisure or exercise.

× When I when I was when I was a child, my parent point me give give me a birthday gift. I was so surprised when I know that this is a quite a.

✓ When I was a child, my parents gave me a birthday gift. I was so surprised when I found out that it was quite special.

There are multiple sentence structure and verb tense issues. 'When I when I was when I was' is repetition and should be simplified. 'my parent' should be plural 'my parents' (singular/plural issue). 'point me give give me' is ungrammatical; the intended meaning is past action so use past simple 'gave me' (past tense issue). 'when I know' is incorrect tense—use past 'when I found out'. 'this is a quite a' is ungrammatical word order and article use; change to 'it was quite special' to match past context and correct article/adjective placement. Suggestion: remove repeated words, use correct plural for 'parents', use past simple verbs for past events, and use clear adjective phrase after 'was'.

× I don't think that BY are popular in my country.

✓ I don't think that bikes are popular in my country.

The sentence has an incorrect capitalized abbreviation 'BY' which should be the noun 'bikes'. Also 'don't think' is present simple and correctly used for a general present opinion. Ensure the noun is plural 'bikes' to match 'are' (singular/plural agreement). Suggestion: use the correct noun and maintain present simple for opinions.

× This is because nowadays there are many public transport like bus cars and motorbikes.

✓ This is because nowadays there is a lot of public transport, like buses, cars, and motorbikes.

'there are many public transport' is ungrammatical because 'public transport' is an uncountable noun, so use 'there is a lot of public transport' or list countable vehicles with plural nouns. Also items in the list should be plural: 'buses, cars, and motorbikes'. Suggestion: choose correct countable/uncountable phrasing and pluralize items in lists.

× So they often use motorbike to move because it is convenient than when we use BY and it always.

✓ So they often use motorbikes to get around because they are more convenient than bikes and they are available all the time.

Several issues: 'use motorbike to move' is wrong preposition/verb choice—use 'use motorbikes to get around' or 'to travel'. 'it is convenient than' needs comparative structure 'more convenient than'. Also 'when we use BY' should be 'than bikes' (correct noun and comparison). 'and it always' is incomplete; clarify as 'and they are available all the time' or 'and they are more convenient in many situations'. Suggestions: use 'get around' for moving locally, use 'more... than' for comparisons, pluralize vehicles, and complete the final clause for clarity.