自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and reduce filler words (e.g., “umm,” “mmm,” “however” repeated). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and precise vocabulary (e.g., “ride” not “write”) and correct cause-effect phrasing (e.g., “so it broke often, so I couldn't ride it much”). Aim for 2–4 sentences and use a linking word once to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was in elementary school; my mum bought it for my birthday. It was low quality and broke often, so I couldn’t ride it as much as I wanted.

建議: Provide a clear opinion in one sentence, then support it with specific reasons or a brief comparison. Avoid incorrect word choices (e.g., “cure people to” is wrong) and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like “because” or “but” to show contrast. Be specific about who prefers alternatives now and why (e.g., public transport, cars, e-bikes). Keep to 2–3 sentences total.

範例: I think bikes used to be very popular because they were cheap and convenient for short trips within cities. But nowadays many people prefer e-bikes or public transport because they are faster and more comfortable in busy urban areas.

× Yeah, I did have a bike MMM in elementary school, however, umm, my mum bought it for me for my birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike in elementary school; my mum bought it for me for my birthday.

Use simple past without 'did' when making a statement (did + base form is used for emphasis or negatives/questions). Also remove filler words and combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I had' instead of 'I did have' in neutral statements.

× However it wasn't very good quality so that it broke many times so that I couldn't write it as much as I wanted.

✓ However, it wasn't very good quality, so it broke many times and I couldn't ride it as much as I wanted.

Multiple issues: 'so that' is incorrect here; use 'so' to show result. 'Write' is incorrect word choice; should be 'ride.' Also sentence needed commas and conjunction 'and' to connect results. Suggestion: use 'so' for result and choose correct verb 'ride.'

× Well in the past I did think it's so popular that everyone should have one at least since it's very convenient and it can cure people to wherever they want within China within their like city.

✓ Well, in the past I thought bikes were so popular that everyone should have at least one, since they were very convenient and could take people wherever they wanted within their city in China.

Tense sequence: 'in the past' requires past tense throughout ('thought', 'were', 'could', 'wanted'). 'It's' should be 'they were' to agree with plural 'bikes.' 'Cure' is wrong word choice; use 'take.' Reorder phrase 'within their city in China' for clarity. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense and use correct verbs and plural agreement.

× However, nowadays people are pre preferred to.

✓ However, nowadays people prefer bicycles.

'are pre preferred to' is ungrammatical. Use the simple present 'prefer' to express general present habit. Remove 'to' unless followed by an object (e.g., 'prefer buses to bikes'). Suggestion: say 'people prefer bicycles' or 'people prefer other modes of transport' depending on intended meaning.