自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is direct and natural, but too brief. To improve, give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details (e.g., when you got the bike, how you used it, who taught you). Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 short sentences) and use a linking word when adding details (e.g., "and", "because", "so"). Also correct small grammar: say "Yes, I did" or "Yes, definitely, I did."

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven, and I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood every day. My older brother taught me how to balance, so I became confident riding quickly.

建議: Your answer communicates the main idea but has many grammar and word-choice errors that make it hard to follow. Improve by using clear vocabulary and correct sentence structure: start with a topic sentence stating your opinion, then add specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like "because", "for example", or "therefore". Avoid literal translations (e.g., "propaganda" and "lost oil"). Instead say "promotion of green living" and "rising fuel prices" or "to save fuel".

範例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country because there is a strong promotion of green living and fuel has become expensive. For example, many people now cycle to work or school to save money and reduce pollution, and local governments are building more bike lanes to encourage this change.

× Yeah, back so appropriate in my contrary.

✓ Yeah, bikes are quite popular in my country.

The original sentence has multiple problems: incorrect word choice ('back so appropriate', 'contrary') and wrong preposition. This falls under incorrect use of prepositions and general word choice; to correct, use 'in my country' (correct preposition) and a clear adjective phrase 'quite popular'. Keep subject 'bikes' to match the question and use present simple for a general statement. Suggestion: Practice common collocations for talking about popularity: 'popular in my country', 'common in my country'. Use 'country' instead of 'contrary'.

× Definitely, because with the propaganda of the green life lost oil, most people I try to go out by bike or on foot.

✓ Definitely, because with campaigns promoting green living and saving oil, most people try to travel by bike or on foot.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and phrases ('with the propaganda of the green life lost oil') and has awkward word order. This is categorized as incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure. Replace 'with the propaganda of' with 'with campaigns promoting' (more natural), 'green life' with 'green living', and 'lost oil' with 'saving oil' or 'conserving oil'. Also remove the extra subject 'I' before 'try'. Use 'travel by bike' or 'go by bike' and 'on foot' is correct. Suggestion: Keep verb 'try' without an extra subject: 'most people try to...'. Use nouns and verbs that collocate: 'campaigns promoting', 'green living', 'conserve oil'.