自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (past tense), and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Pronunciation and fluency need smoothing (e.g., remove hesitations like "OK" and "um").

範例: Yes, I did. When I was three, my mother bought me a small pink bike with training wheels, and I used it to ride to kindergarten and play with neighbors. Because it was lightweight and cheerful-looking, I felt confident learning to pedal quickly.

建議: Give a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g., "people who use bikes") and avoid filler words. Mention a brief comparison or statistic if possible to strengthen your point.

範例: Yes, they are. In Vietnam many people use bicycles and motorbikes for short trips because they are cheap and convenient; for example, students often cycle to school and commuters use them to avoid traffic, which also helps reduce air pollution.

× OK, yes, of course when I was tried, my mother bought for me a mini bike.

✓ OK, yes, of course when I was three, my mother bought me a mini bike.

Incorrect word 'tried' seems to be a mispronunciation or wrong word; the speaker intended an age (e.g., 'three'). Also 'bought for me' is unnatural; use 'bought me' for the indirect object. Use past tense 'bought' is correct for a past event. Suggestion: replace 'tried' with the correct age word and change 'bought for me' to 'bought me'.

× So my bike was pink and really small and I I use my bike for going out or going to school and it's really fun and it's cute and I also buy.

✓ So my bike was pink and really small and I used my bike to go out or to go to school; it was really fun and cute, and I also liked it.

The sentence mixes past context with present-tense 'use' and 'it's'. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be past: 'used' not 'use', 'it was' not 'it's'. 'for going out or going to school' is better as 'to go out or to go to school'. The phrase 'I also buy' is incorrect tense and unclear; likely intended 'I also liked it.' Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use infinitive 'to go' instead of 'for going'.

× my country is Vietnam and it has a lot of people who using bikes when they go to work or go to school because bikes are really convenient and protect the environment.

✓ My country is Vietnam and many people use bikes when they go to work or to school because bikes are really convenient and help protect the environment.

After 'people who' you need a finite verb 'use', not the -ing form 'using'. Also 'a lot of people' is acceptable but 'many people' is more natural. 'Protect the environment' needs an agent; 'help protect the environment' is clearer. Maintain present simple for general truths ('use', 'are'). Suggestion: replace 'who using' with 'who use' or simply 'many people use' and add 'help' before 'protect'.