自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid hesitations and incorrect nouns (you said “bag” instead of “bike”) and wrong verb forms. For example, mention who bought it, where you rode it, and how often, using past tense and short linking phrases like “because,” “so,” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was seven, and I rode it almost every day in the garden with my friends. Because the garden was safe and close to home, we spent hours practicing turns and racing each other.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples. Begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.”) then add one or two specific supporting points using linking words like “for example,” “because,” or “in addition.” Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (“very lovely to take, take bikes”) and ensure correct word order and verb forms. Keep the answer under five sentences and fluent.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many children ride bikes to school and to play with friends because biking is cheap and good exercise. In addition, cities have many bike paths, so families often buy bikes for their children.

× Yes I have, my mom bought a bag for me and uh, I always umm, taking a bag with my friends in the garden.

✓ Yes, I did. My mom bought a bike for me, and I always took it to the garden with my friends.

The student mixes present and past tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. The question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'Yes I have' should be 'Yes, I did' to answer a past question. 'Bought a bag' is likely a word choice error; context implies 'bike'. 'I always ... taking' combines present and -ing incorrectly; use simple past 'I always took it' to match time frame. Also add commas for clarity and correct word order 'took it to the garden with my friends'. Suggestions: use consistent past tense for childhood descriptions; replace present forms and -ing with simple past when describing habitual past actions.

× Yes, I think so. In our country children are very lovely to take, take bikes with their friends, Go over here.

✓ Yes, I think so. In our country, children like to ride bikes with their friends and go to the park.

This sentence has tense and word-choice problems and awkward structure (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'Children are very lovely to take' is ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'children like to ride' or 'enjoy riding.' 'Take, take bikes' is repetitive and incorrect. 'Go over here' is unclear; 'go to the park' fits context. Use present simple 'children like' for general statements. Add commas and use correct verbs 'ride' or 'ride bikes' rather than 'take bikes.' Suggestions: use 'like to ride' for habitual present actions; avoid repetition and choose clear destination phrases such as 'go to the park'.