自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetition. Also correct grammar (e.g., ‘had’ not ‘have’; ‘when I was 7 or 10 years old’), and describe the bike simply (e.g., colour, what you liked about it).

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was seven, and it was bright red. I loved riding it to the park because it was lightweight and easy to control.

建議: Organize your response: give a direct opinion first, then support it with clear reasons and a prediction. Use correct verb forms (e.g., ‘people have’, ‘used to’, ‘will have’) and linking words (e.g., ‘however’, ‘because’, ‘in the past’). Avoid hesitations and keep to two or three sentences maximum. Be specific about trends (e.g., rise of cars, current bike lanes, electric bikes).

範例: At the moment, bikes are less popular because many people prefer cars for convenience. However, in recent years cycling has been growing again due to new bike lanes and electric bikes, so I think more people will cycle in the future.

× Yes, when I was a child, I uh have a bike and my my father bought a bike for me and when I was a 10/7 years old, I like it and my bike was a red.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bike and my father bought it for me. When I was about seven to ten years old, I liked it and my bike was red.

Multiple verbs refer to past time but are incorrectly in present or ungrammatical forms. Use past simple for completed past actions: 'have' -> 'had', 'like' -> 'liked'. Also simplify repetition and awkward phrasing. Replace 'my my father bought a bike for me' with 'my father bought it for me'. Use 'was red' (not 'was a red'). Use a clear age expression 'about seven to ten years old' instead of 'a 10/7 years old'.

× And nowadays, no, uh, because many people have cars, uh, bought at the past, uh, many people, uh, has a bike and go, umm, go to there with it.

✓ Nowadays, no, because many people have cars. In the past, many people had a bike and went places with it.

There are subject-verb agreement and tense sequence problems. 'Many people ... has a bike' is incorrect; for plural subject use 'had' (past) or 'have' (present). Context contrasts past and present, so use past tense 'had' and 'went'. 'Bought at the past' is ungrammatical; use 'In the past'. 'Go to there' is wrong; use 'went places' or 'went there'.

× I think in the future, many people, umm, will has a bike.

✓ I think in the future many people will have a bike.

Modal 'will' must be followed by the base form of the verb. 'Will has' is incorrect; use 'will have'. Also remove unnecessary fillers and commas for clarity.