自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence stating you did not have a bike, give one brief reason or feeling, and finish with a short statement about the present. Use correct tense (e.g., 'I wished' → 'I wished' or better 'I hoped') and smoother linking words (e.g., 'however', 'but'). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I tried to learn to ride once but never managed to, so my family didn't buy one for me. However, I always wanted one, and now I finally own a bike.

建議: Give a clear overall opinion first, then support it with specific contrasting examples using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'for example', 'on the other hand'). Reduce filler words and correct phrasing ('ups and downs' → 'hilly terrain' or 'steep slopes'). Aim for 2–4 concise sentences with precise vocabulary.

範例: Bikes are fairly popular in my country, but it depends on the region. For example, my hometown has hilly terrain, which makes cycling difficult; however, cities like Shanghai are flat and have good cycling infrastructure, so many people use bikes there.

× Well, actually I didn't have a bike because, umm, I tried to learn how to ride a bike, but I didn't learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Well, actually I didn't have a bike because I tried to learn how to ride a bike, but I didn't learn.

The sentence repeats 'how to ride a bike' unnecessarily and uses past tense correctly; simplify the clause to avoid redundancy. Remove the repeated phrase to improve clarity and concision.

× So I don't, I, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I wish I have one, but now I have one.

✓ So I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I wished I had one; now I have one.

The verb forms are inconsistent. 'Wish' referring to a past regret should use past tense 'wished' and the subordinate clause should use the past perfect or past simple 'had' to match the time reference. Use consistent past forms for past wishes and 'now I have one' for present fact.

× I think it depends. Some areas, umm, like my hometown, there are a lot ups and downs, so it's not suitable for riding a bike.

✓ I think it depends. In some areas, like my hometown, there are a lot of ups and downs, so it's not suitable for riding a bike.

The preposition 'In' is needed to introduce locations ('In some areas'). Also 'a lot ups and downs' lacks required preposition and plural marker; correct form is 'a lot of ups and downs' or simply 'many ups and downs'.

× But umm, in some areas like in here in Shanghai, it's suitable.

✓ But in some areas here in Shanghai, it is suitable.

The phrase 'in here in Shanghai' is redundant and awkward. Remove the extra 'in' and use 'here in Shanghai' or 'in Shanghai'. Also expand contraction for formality if desired: 'it is suitable.'

× So I think it's popular.

✓ So I think bicycles are popular.

The pronoun 'it' ambiguously refers to 'bike(s)'. Since the question asks about bikes (plural), use 'bicycles are popular' to ensure subject-verb agreement and clarity.