自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Break your response into a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences), avoid repetition, and use linking words (for example, “because,” “so,” “until”) more precisely. Add a vivid specific detail (e.g., what colour it was or a memorable moment) and correct small grammar issues (‘in cycle’ → ‘on my bicycle’).

範例: Yes. I had a bicycle that my father gave me when I was in Class 2. It was bright red and quickly became my favorite because I rode it every afternoon around our neighborhood. I especially remember learning to balance on the hill behind our house until the bike finally wore out.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, then provide two clear, specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “therefore”). Avoid repeating phrases like ‘for individual’ and choose more natural collocations (‘for daily commuting’, ‘affordable for individuals’). Give a concrete example or statistic to strengthen your answer.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to commute in crowded cities. For example, many people cycle to work or the market every day since cars are too expensive for most families. As a result, bicycles are a common sight on both urban streets and village lanes.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, my father gave it to me when I was in Class 2 as a gift and it was my favorite bike and I rode it almost every day around my house because I love to roam around my house in cycle and it was my favorite bike until it became too old to.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me when I was in Class 2 as a gift, and it was my favorite bike. I rode it almost every day around my house because I loved to roam around my neighborhood by bicycle, and it remained my favorite until it became too old to use.

Multiple tense inconsistencies: the student mixes past simple (had, gave, rode) with present simple (love) while describing past events. Use past tense consistently when recounting past experiences (loved, remained). Also split the run-on sentence into shorter sentences for clarity and change 'in cycle' to 'by bicycle' or 'on a bicycle'. Suggestion: keep verbs describing the past in past simple and divide long sentences into clearer units. '},{