自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve accuracy and fluency: correct verb choice and remove hesitations; give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words if adding details. For example, say you owned a bike, mention its color or who gave it to you, and where exactly you used to ride it.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small blue bike that my parents bought for me, and I often rode it around the playground and the streets near my school.

建議: Make the response more precise and natural: start with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and one short example. Avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Replace awkward phrasing like “are riding bikes” with “ride bikes.”

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or school, and my mother encouraged me to learn so I could ride to school safely.

× Yes, I need to hand, uh, bike when I was a child and I remember riding it around the school area near my house.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I remember riding it around the school area near my house.

ID 5 (Past tense issue) and ID 26 (Sentence structure errors): The student used 'need to hand' which is incorrect and does not fit past-tense meaning. The correct past-tense verb is 'had' to state possession in the past. Also remove the filler 'hand' which appears to be a mis-saying. Suggestion: use simple past 'had' for possession when referring to childhood and keep the rest of the sentence in past tense for consistency.

× Yes, actually most of the people here in the Philippines are riding bikes and that's the reason why I also learned to ride a bike because my mom wanted me to learn it so that I can use it going to school.

✓ Yes, actually most people here in the Philippines ride bikes, and that's why I also learned to ride a bike: my mom wanted me to learn so that I could use it to go to school.

ID 6 (Present tense issue) and ID 5 (Past tense issue) and ID 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions): 'are riding' suggests an action happening now rather than a general habit; use simple present 'ride' for habitual facts. 'Most of the people' is wordy; 'most people' is natural. 'so that I can use it going to school' is awkward; use 'so that I could use it to go to school' to match past intention (past of 'can' is 'could') and correct preposition/structure 'use it to go to school'. Also combine clauses more clearly. Suggestion: use simple present for general statements, simple past or modal past 'could' for the reason tied to a past event, and 'to go to school' as the correct infinitive phrase.