自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and complete. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details (what kind of bike, who gave it, a memorable moment). Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences) and avoid grammar mistakes like missing verbs or articles.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon. I especially remember learning to ride without training wheels with my father’s help, which made me feel very proud.

建議: Improve coherence and grammar, and use linking words to make the answer flow. Begin with a clear opinion, then explain distribution using linking words (e.g. “however”, “in contrast”, “for example”), give a specific reason or statistic if possible, and finish with a brief personal note. Avoid repetition and tighten phrasing.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular overall. However, popularity varies: in rural areas they are less common, while in big cities many people cycle to work because it’s faster and cheaper than driving. For example, my city has dedicated bike lanes and a bike-sharing scheme, which encourages commuting by bicycle. Personally, I enjoy riding for exercise and short trips.

× Yes, I had and it was wonderful.

✓ Yes, I had one and it was wonderful.

The original sentence omits the object of 'had'. In English, 'have' meaning 'own' requires an object (a noun) — e.g., 'a bike' or 'one'. This is a sentence structure error related to verb complementation and past tense usage. Adding 'one' (or 'a bike') completes the idea and keeps the past tense 'had' correct. Suggestion: always include the noun after 'had' when talking about possession (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× Yes, I think they are. Despite in some parts of my country they are really not so popular in other parts.

✓ Yes, I think they are. However, in some parts of my country they are not very popular, while in other parts they are.

The phrase 'Despite in some parts' incorrectly uses the preposition 'despite'. 'Despite' should be followed by a noun phrase (e.g., 'despite this') and not a clause beginning with 'in'. The sentence also lacks a clear contrast connector. Replacing 'Despite' with 'However' and adding 'while' clarifies the contrast. Also replace 'really not so popular' with 'not very popular' for natural adverb/adjective usage. Suggestion: use 'despite' with a noun phrase ('despite that') or use conjunctions like 'however' or 'while' to contrast clauses.

× In particular in bigger cities they are very very popular and used by many people to commute daily.

✓ In particular, in bigger cities they are very popular and are used by many people to commute daily.

The sentence needs a comma after 'In particular' for clarity and repeats 'very' unnecessarily. More importantly, the passive participle 'used' should be preceded by 'are' to form the passive voice properly: 'they are used'. This is a preposition/punctuation and verb-form issue affecting sentence correctness. Suggestion: include the auxiliary 'are' when using passive constructions and avoid redundant adverb repetition.

× I also enjoy riding.

✓ I also enjoy riding bikes.

While 'I also enjoy riding' is grammatically acceptable, it is vague because 'riding' can refer to many things. In context, specifying 'bikes' makes the sentence clearer and more complete. This is a sentence structure and clarity issue. Suggestion: include the object of the gerund when needed for clarity (e.g., 'enjoy riding bikes').