自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and directly responds to the question, but it is slightly wordy and repeats ideas (safety/they didn’t get me one). To improve: 1) Start with a concise topic sentence. 2) Add one specific supporting detail (e.g., an age or alternative transport) using a linking word. 3) Keep the response within 2–3 sentences. This will make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my parents worried about road safety. For example, when I was eight they preferred I walk to school or take the bus instead of cycling.

建議: Your answer is relevant and gives observational evidence, but it is repetitive and uses informal phrases (“roaming here and there,” “So yeah”). To improve: 1) Use a clear topic sentence. 2) Provide one specific supporting detail with a linking word (for example, mention commuting, cost, or statistics). 3) Replace informal expressions with concise vocabulary to sound more natural and precise.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, many people commute by bicycle to work and markets because it is cheap and faster than driving in congested streets.

× No, I didn't have my bike when I was a child because my parents were so concerned about the safety, so they didn't get me one.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents were very concerned about safety, so they didn't get me one.

The phrase 'my bike' implies ownership that contradicts 'I didn't have'; use 'a bike' to indicate any bike. 'so concerned about the safety' is awkward: remove the definite article and use 'very' for emphasis. This is primarily an article and word-choice issue (Grammar Problem Type 22 and 13) but the required correction addresses noun article usage and adjective/adverb choice. Suggestion: use 'a bike' when indicating an unspecified item and 'concerned about safety' or 'very concerned about safety.'

× Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in my home country because I see everyone roaming here and there with bikes and there's a huge traffic of bikes on the street rather than cars.

✓ Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in my country because I see many people riding bikes everywhere and there is a lot of bike traffic on the streets compared to cars.

'I see everyone roaming here and there with bikes' is informal and uses 'roaming' incorrectly; 'riding bikes' or 'cycling' is correct. 'There's a huge traffic of bikes' is ungrammatical: use 'there is a lot of bike traffic' or 'heavy bike traffic.' Also change 'on the street' to the plural 'on the streets' and 'rather than cars' to 'compared to cars' for clarity. These are present-tense descriptive statements, so keep present simple. Recommendation: use 'many people' or 'a lot of people' and 'riding bikes' or 'cycling' and 'heavy bike traffic' for natural English.