自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear, direct topic sentence first, then add 1–2 concise supporting details. Avoid grammar errors (use past tense) and unnecessary filler words (uh, um). Use linking words (so, because) to connect ideas and provide a specific reason or brief example.

範例: No, I didn’t own a bike when I was a child. Instead, my family often rented bicycles at the local park because we didn’t have space at home to store a bike. For example, every weekend we would rent two bikes and ride around the lake for an hour.

建議: Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give two clear, specific reasons linked by words like because or so. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, countable/uncountable forms) and avoid fillers. Use concrete examples (crowded streets, good public transport) to support your view.

範例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country because the streets are often crowded and there isn’t much space for cyclists. Also, public transport is cheap and convenient, so most people prefer buses and trains rather than riding bikes.

× I don't own myself, uh, when I'm a child, but we sometimes go to the park and rent a bicycle and just ride around the park instead of, uh, buying one 'cause we don't have any space at home for putting the bike.

✓ I didn't own one when I was a child, but we sometimes went to the park and rented a bicycle and just rode around the park instead of buying one because we didn't have any space at home to keep a bike.

Original sentence uses incorrect pronoun 'I don't own myself' and incorrect tense mix (present instead of past) for a past time frame. This is primarily a pronoun error combined with tense errors. Use 'one' to refer to 'a bike' and change verbs to past tense ('didn't own', 'was', 'went', 'rented', 'rode', 'didn't have') to match 'when I was a child'. Replace informal 'cause' with 'because' and use 'to keep a bike' for correct prepositional phrase.

× Umm, I don't think bikes are popular in my country 'cause umm, the it's very crowded, there aren't too much space for the bike to ride on the road and peep.

✓ Umm, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because it's very crowded; there isn't much space for bikes to ride on the road and pavements.

Sentence has several pronoun and article issues (e.g., 'the it's') and incorrect quantifier 'too much space' with countable 'space' concept. Use 'it's' for 'it is', remove extra 'the', use 'there isn't much space' (uncountable) and plural 'bikes' to match general reference. Replace 'peep' (likely 'pavement') with 'pavements' or 'sidewalks' depending on dialect.

× Uh, it's very convenient place. People often commute with public trans.

✓ Uh, it's a very convenient place. People often commute by public transport.

Missing article before 'very convenient place' — add 'a'. 'Commute with public trans' is incorrect: use the preposition 'by' with 'public transport' (full noun). This fixes pronoun/article and preposition use and clarifies the phrase.