自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Content and clarity issues: the answer contains an apparent mistake (“not permitted to write”) that confuses meaning and reduces coherence. The response is longer than needed and includes irrelevant or sensitive details without clear connection to the question. To improve, give a concise direct topic sentence, correct the intended reason (e.g. 'not permitted to ride'), and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences, use clear vocabulary, and avoid unrelated or potentially controversial statements unless directly relevant.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family didn’t allow girls to ride bikes, so I usually walked or took the bus to school. As a result, I often missed playing or cycling with my friends, which made me feel left out.

建議: Strengths: direct answer and clear opinion. Issues: repetition (“everyone…everyone”), grammatical errors (subject-verb agreement, extra words), and slight lack of specific supporting details. To improve, use a topic sentence, add 1–2 specific reasons or examples with linking words (for example, ‘because’ or ‘for instance’), correct grammar, and avoid absolute statements like ‘everyone.’ Keep responses concise and natural.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles to commute short distances in cities, and bike lanes make cycling faster when you are in a hurry.

× No, I didn't have a bike as a child because girls in my family were not permitted to write.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike as a child because girls in my family were not permitted to ride.

The student used the verb 'write' incorrectly; context requires 'ride' for bicycles. This is a vocabulary choice error rather than grammar, but it affects pronoun referent clarity because 'girls in my family' is correct; change 'write' to 'ride' to match meaning. Suggestion: use verbs that fit context (ride a bike).

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and everyone is riding a bike nowadays.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and everyone rides a bike nowadays.

The sentence mixes simple present ('are very popular') with present continuous ('is/are riding') in a general statement. For habitual or general facts use simple present: 'everyone rides'. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths and habits.

× I would like to say in addition, everyone in our country have a bike.

✓ I would like to add that everyone in our country has a bike.

'Everyone' is singular and requires a singular verb 'has', not 'have'. Also 'say in addition' is awkward; 'add that' is a natural phrase. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with indefinite pronouns like everyone (he/she/it forms).

× It is easy and convenient to get the to the destination when you are in a hurry.

✓ It is easy and convenient to get to the destination when you are in a hurry.

There is an extra definite article 'the' before 'to the destination' making 'the to' incorrect. Correct preposition phrase is 'get to the destination' or simply 'get to your destination'. Suggestion: remove the extra 'the' and use 'get to' for reaching places.