自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and hesitations; correct tense and articles (e.g. “my mum supported my arms”).

範例: Yes. My mother bought me a white bike with training wheels when I was five. I remember she supported my arms while I practised, and after a few days I could ride without help.

建議: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Avoid unclear phrasing and grammar errors (e.g. “people choose them for transportation”).

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. For example, many cities have public bike‑sharing systems, and people often choose bikes for short commutes because they are cheap and convenient.

× Yes my mom did buy me a bike when I was five.

✓ Yes, my mom bought me a bike when I was five.

The sentence uses 'did buy' which is unnecessary in a simple past statement; the correct simple past form is 'bought'. Use 'did' + base verb only for emphasis or questions. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I remember that bike is white with two small wheels and also the experience of learning how to ride a bike or phone.

✓ I remember that the bike was white with two small wheels, and I also remember the experience of learning how to ride a bike.

The time reference is past, so use past tense 'was' not present 'is'. 'The' is needed before 'bike' to refer back to the specific bike. The phrase 'or phone' is irrelevant and likely erroneous, so it is removed. Split into clearer clauses and add a comma before 'and' to join two related past memories.

× I mean my mum support my arms, hold my arms to ride till I I I know the.

✓ I mean my mum supported my arms and held them while I was learning to ride until I could do it on my own.

Pronouns and verb forms are incorrect: use past tense verbs 'supported' and 'held' to match the past context. Replace 'my arms' repetition with 'them' to avoid awkwardness. Use 'while I was learning' and 'until I could do it on my own' to make the sequence and meaning clear. Remove stuttering 'I I I' and the incomplete fragment 'know the'.

× Yes I do, there are bikes provided to let us rent all over the country and and many people would like to choose buy us their transportation.

✓ Yes, I do. There are bikes provided for rent all over the country, and many people choose them as their transportation.

Split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'provided for rent' or 'available to rent' instead of 'provided to let us rent'. Remove duplicated 'and'. The phrase 'choose buy us their transportation' is ungrammatical; replace with 'choose them as their transportation' to use correct object and verb. Add commas and periods for correct punctuation.