自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Directly answer the examiner's question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the exact question back. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences).

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used it every day to ride to the park. Because the area near our home was safe and quiet, I learned to ride quickly and gained a lot of confidence.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then support it with one or two specific reasons and a linking word. Replace vague adjectives like “best” with precise descriptions and give a concrete example or comparison. Keep to a maximum of five sentences and natural vocabulary.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are a convenient and affordable way to travel, especially in crowded cities. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes to work or school since they can avoid traffic and save money on public transport.

× I think bikes are very popular in my country because bikes are the best, convenient and budget friendly medium of travelling.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are the best, most convenient, and most budget-friendly means of travel.

The sentence has multiple issues: repetition of 'bikes' makes it wordy; 'the best, convenient and budget friendly' mixes forms and lacks parallelism; 'medium of travelling' is an awkward collocation. According to 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26) and 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' (ID 13) and 'Article errors' (ID 22) the correction uses a pronoun ('they') to avoid repetition, applies parallel comparative forms ('most convenient, and most budget-friendly') to maintain balance, uses hyphenation for the compound adjective 'budget-friendly', and replaces 'medium of travelling' with the more natural 'means of travel'. Suggestion: use pronouns to avoid repetition, keep parallel structure in lists of adjectives, and prefer natural collocations (means of travel).