自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Grammar and sentence structure need correction. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, use correct past tense, and avoid extra words. Add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. However, I often borrowed a neighbour’s bicycle to ride to school, which helped me learn to balance and enjoy cycling.

建議: The answer is unclear and contains incorrect content. Start with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words (for example, because, therefore, for instance). Use relevant vocabulary (commuting, affordable, cycling culture) and avoid unrelated statements. Keep it natural and concise.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, students often cycle to school and many cities have bike lanes, which makes cycling convenient and affordable.

× When I was a child I don't have a bike because on that time my parents didn't allowed me.

✓ When I was a child I didn't have a bike because at that time my parents didn't allow me.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't have') with past context 'When I was a child'. Use simple past 'didn't have'. Also 'didn't allowed' is wrong because after 'did' the main verb must be in base form: 'allow'. Finally, the prepositional phrase should be 'at that time' not 'on that time'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense throughout: 'When I was a child I didn't have a bike because at that time my parents didn't allow me.'

× Yes, some bikes are very popular in our country because every child dream has to become a writer.

✓ Yes, some bikes are very popular in our country, but many children dream of becoming writers.

The original sentence has several issues: 'because' gives an illogical reason; 'every child dream has to become a writer' is ungrammatical. Use 'many children dream of becoming writers' to express common aspirations. 'Dream' needs the preposition 'of' when followed by a verb in -ing: 'dream of becoming'. Also plural agreement: 'writers' matches 'many children'. Use a contrasting connector ('but') or simply a comma to separate the agreement from the explanation. Suggestion: say 'Yes, some bikes are very popular in our country, and many children dream of becoming writers.' if you want to link both ideas positively.