自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Good direct response with clear topic sentence and personal detail. To improve, trim redundancy and add one specific supporting detail (where or with whom, or a brief consequence) using a linking word to make it more coherent. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 short sentences).

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike at about six, and my dad taught me to ride it in our neighborhood park. As a result, I became confident riding on quiet roads, and I still remember the thrill of speeding down the street.

建議: Answer is relevant and gives reasons, but contains a small grammatical error and some redundancy ('save money and about and avoid traffic'). Improve coherence by using a linking word (for example, 'therefore' or 'so') and include a specific example or statistic to strengthen the point. Keep sentences compact and check for word choice/typos.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and easy to maintain. Therefore, many commuters choose them to save money and avoid traffic during rush hour; for example, I see dozens of cyclists on my route to work every morning.

× I still remember the thrill of speeding down the street and I cherish that memory from my childhood.

✓ I still remember the thrill of speeding down the street, and I cherish that memory from my childhood.

This sentence has a punctuation/coordination issue causing a run-on feel; grammatically the verbs 'remember' and 'cherish' are both present tense and agree with the subject 'I'. The correction adds a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to correctly join two independent clauses. Suggestion: use a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses to improve clarity and correctness.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they're inexpensive and easy to maintain, especially when people are going to work.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they're inexpensive and easy to maintain, especially when people go to work.

The phrase 'are going to work' is grammatically correct but here the simple present 'go to work' is more appropriate for habitual actions. The error falls under incorrect use of verb tense affecting pronoun-related generic statement. Suggestion: use simple present for regular/habitual actions (people go to work) rather than present continuous.

× I think it's the most convenient option for transportation, so many people would choose them to save money and about and avoid traffic.

✓ I think it's the most convenient option for transportation, so many people choose them to save money and avoid traffic.

The original sentence has extra word 'about' and incorrect use of conditional 'would' which makes the sentence awkward when stating a general fact. This is a sentence structure error: remove the extraneous word 'about' and use simple present 'choose' for habitual/general truths instead of 'would choose'. Suggestion: state general facts in simple present and delete unnecessary words.