自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct basic grammar (past tense, subject–verb agreement) and avoid redundant phrases (e.g., "Thank you for this question"). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in the city center, so there wasn't a safe place to ride and we rarely went to the countryside. Instead, I took part in indoor sports like swimming and badminton, which suited my family's lifestyle.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then add two specific reasons with linking words. Improve vocabulary accuracy (e.g., 'bike lanes' not 'rows for the bikes') and grammar (plural/singular, article use). Avoid vague phrases like 'quite green' without clarification.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many cities have dedicated bike lanes and safe parking, so cycling is a convenient way to commute. Secondly, with rising concern about climate change, more people choose bicycles as an eco-friendly and affordable transport option.

× No, I have never had a bike in my life.

✓ No, I never had a bike in my life.

The question asks about childhood (a finished time period), so past simple ('never had') is more appropriate than present perfect. Use past simple for actions completed in the past at a specific time (your childhood).

× When I was a child I grew up in the city center and so we have never went to the countryside with my parents and I did not have a place to ride a bike.

✓ When I was a child I grew up in the city center, so we never went to the countryside with my parents and I did not have a place to ride a bike.

Mixing present perfect ('have') with past tense 'went' is incorrect. Use past simple consistently for completed past events: 'we never went'. Also 'so' connects clauses and needs proper punctuation. Ensure verb forms match the past time frame.

× I did some other sports instead, but this type of physical has never been my prior one.

✓ I did other sports instead, but physical activity was never my priority.

Phrase 'this type of physical' is unnatural; use 'physical activity.' 'Has never been my prior one' is incorrect — use 'was never my priority' to match past tense and correct collocation. Also remove unnecessary article and reorder words for natural expression.

× My country is quite green and it has a lot of rows for the bikes and it is one of the easiest way to get to your destination.

✓ My country is quite green and has a lot of bike lanes, and they are one of the easiest ways to get to your destination.

'Rows for the bikes' is wrong collocation; 'bike lanes' is correct. Use plural agreement ('they are') because 'bike lanes' is plural, and 'one of the easiest ways' matches countable plural form. Remove redundant 'it' before 'has'.

× And also people become more and more aware about climate change so I think that they will choose a more safe and eco friendly option.

✓ Also, people are becoming more and more aware of climate change, so I think they will choose a safer and more eco-friendly option.

Use 'aware of' (not 'aware about'). Use progressive 'are becoming' to describe an ongoing trend. 'More safe' should be comparative 'safer'. Hyphenate 'eco-friendly' when used as adjective. Remove redundant 'that' for conciseness.