自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and accurate with tense and word choice, use a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, correct verb forms (remembered → remember), remove unnecessary prepositions (riding to a bicycle → riding my bicycle), and add a brief reason or memory. Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a red bicycle when I was about eight, and I loved riding it around our neighborhood. For example, I often raced my friends after school, which made those afternoons really fun.

建議: Make a clear, direct statement first, then support it with a specific reason or example and correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, because) and fix phrasing (some of employers → some employees; commute to when early in their office → commute to work early). Keep it concise and specific.

範例: Yes, I do. Bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many employees ride motorbikes or bicycles to work early to avoid traffic.

× I remembered when I was a child my parents bought me one and I really enjoyed riding to a bicycle.

✓ I remember that when I was a child my parents bought me one and I really enjoyed riding a bicycle.

The speaker mixed past-tense narration with an incorrect past simple verb 'remembered' used like a present recollection. Use 'I remember' to indicate a present memory about past events. Also 'riding to a bicycle' is incorrect preposition use and collocation; use 'riding a bicycle'. Replace 'riding to a bicycle' with 'riding a bicycle' for correct verb-object structure.

× It makes me happy.

✓ It made me happy.

Context of the sentence is a past event (childhood), so the verb should be in the past tense 'made' rather than present 'makes'. This is a tense consistency issue tied to prepositional/time context. Use past tense to match surrounding past-tense narration.

× Yes I do. I think bikes are very popular here in the Philippines and some of employers use it to commute to when early in their office.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bikes are very popular here in the Philippines and some employers use them to commute to work when they arrive early at the office.

Multiple errors: 'some of employers' is incorrect; use 'some employers' (article/quantifier error). 'use it' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes' so use 'them' (pronoun agreement). 'to commute to when early in their office' is ungrammatical: correct collocation is 'commute to work' and specify timing with 'when they arrive early at the office.' Also add necessary commas and articles for natural English.