自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, use correct tense and clear vocabulary, and keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. 'Yes, I had a bike as a child.'), then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (past tense for childhood), fix pronouns, and replace unclear words ('Bite') with 'ride a bike'. Avoid contradictions and redundancy.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding it at seven after my older sister taught me how to ride, and she promised to buy me ice cream if I learned within a day. Because of that reward, I practiced a lot and quickly became confident riding on the sidewalk near our home.

建議: Answer directly with a clear opinion sentence, use correct words and plural/singular forms, and avoid hesitations. Support your view with one or two specific reasons and a linking word (e.g. 'however', 'because', 'therefore'). Use precise vocabulary ('bicycles' not 'whites') and complete your sentence. Keep it within 4–5 sentences.

範例: I think bicycles were less popular in Hong Kong in the past because public transport such as the MTR, buses and ferries were faster and more convenient. However, the government has recently promoted cycling by building more bike lanes and rental schemes, so more people are starting to cycle for short trips.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. Use 'had' instead of present 'do have' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past simple for habits or possessions in the past: 'I had a bike.'

× When I was seven years old, I remember my older sister told me how to play the Bite and she even told me that if I can finish learning it within a day, he will buy me ice cream.

✓ When I was seven years old, I remember my older sister taught me how to ride the bike and she even said that if I could finish learning it within a day, she would buy me ice cream.

Multiple errors: 'play the Bite' is incorrect word choice and noun order; correct is 'ride the bike' (verb + object). Reported speech about the past requires backshifting: 'can' -> 'could', 'will' -> 'would'. Pronoun 'he' is incorrect referring to sister; use 'she'. Also 'told me how to' can be 'taught me how to' for learning a skill. Suggestion: For reported past statements use past-tense verbs and backshift modal verbs: 'she said that if I could... she would...'.

× Oh, I think in the old days whites are not that popular in Hong Kong because we have a lot of popular convenient transport for example like train, bus or even ferry umm.

✓ Oh, I think in the old days bikes were not that popular in Hong Kong because we had a lot of convenient public transport, for example trains, buses, or even ferries.

Errors: 'whites' is a wrong word choice; should be 'bikes'. Tense should be past ('were' and 'had') to match 'in the old days'. 'Popular convenient transport' is awkward; use 'convenient public transport'. Also plural nouns for examples: 'trains, buses, ferries'. Suggestion: Choose correct vocabulary ('bikes'), match past tense when referring to past times, and use natural collocations ('convenient public transport').

× But nowadays Hong Kong government try to push umm the use of bicycle and they.

✓ But nowadays the Hong Kong government is trying to promote bicycle use.

Errors: Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'government try' should be 'government is trying' or 'government tries'; progressive 'is trying' suits 'nowadays'. Missing article: 'the Hong Kong government'. Awkward phrase 'push the use of bicycle and they.' The sentence is incomplete; correction makes it complete and grammatical. Suggestion: Include the definite article before 'Hong Kong government', use correct verb form and complete the idea: 'is trying to promote bicycle use.'