自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on answering directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and concise vocabulary, and limit hesitation. Start with a simple past tense sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (because/so) and correct vocabulary (family, poor background → say “we were a poor family”). Avoid unrelated phrases and reduce fillers like “umm” and repetition.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because we were a poor family, my parents couldn’t afford to buy one, so I usually walked to school or shared rides with friends.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons and examples with linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g. “popular,” “exercise,” “weekends,” “cycle”) and avoid repetition and fillers. Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum and connect ideas with words like “because,” “for example,” or “also.”

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because cycling is seen as a healthy and affordable form of exercise. For example, many young people cycle in parks or commute to university on weekends, and cities are increasingly adding bike lanes to encourage riding.

× Now, umm, my eye was born from poor background family and, uh, when I was child, uh, we have from eating problem.

✓ Now, umm, I was born into a poor family and, uh, when I was a child, uh, we had problems with food.

The student used 'my eye' instead of 'I' (pronoun error) and 'was born from poor background family' is unnatural; use 'born into a poor family'. 'When I was child' needs the article 'a'. 'We have from eating problem' mixes tense and prepositions; correct form is 'we had problems with food' to match past tense and correct preposition and noun usage. Suggestion: replace incorrect pronouns and fixed phrases with 'I' and 'born into a poor family', use 'a child', and use past tense 'had' with 'problems with'.

× So we don't have, we didn't have so many money to buy this.

✓ So we didn't have much money to buy one.

The phrase 'so many money' is incorrect because 'money' is an uncountable noun and should use 'much' not 'many'. Also tense consistency: student switches between present 'don't have' and past 'didn't have'; the context is past so use 'didn't have'. 'To buy this' is vague; 'to buy one' (a bike) is clearer. Suggestion: use 'much money' for uncountable nouns and keep past tense consistent.

× Yeah, I think so. They think riding a bike is a healthy, healthy exercise.

✓ Yeah, I think so. People think riding a bike is healthy exercise.

'Repetition "healthy, healthy"' is redundant; remove duplicate. 'A healthy exercise' is acceptable but 'healthy exercise' is more natural. 'They' is vague; 'people' fits general statement. The gerund 'riding' is correctly used here, so only redundancy and word choice are corrected. Suggestion: use 'people' for general statements and avoid repeating adjectives.

× Uh, it, uh, so many young people like to go to light by on week weekend.

✓ Uh, so many young people like to go for bike rides on weekends.

The original sentence has unclear fragments ('go to light by') and wrong word order. 'Go to light by' is nonsensical; likely intended 'go for a bike ride' or 'ride bicycles'. 'On week weekend' should be 'on weekends'. Also delete filler 'it, uh' and keep simple structure: 'many young people like to go for bike rides on weekends.' Suggestion: use clear verbs ('go for bike rides' or 'ride bikes') and correct time expression 'on weekends'.