自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with verb tenses and sentence structure, and make answers more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add two or three supporting details using linking words (for example, “when”, “after that”, “so”). Avoid redundancy (e.g. “of course” and repeated “I have/had”). Use specific details (age, bike color, where you rode) and correct past tense throughout.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was about five I had a small pink bike with training wheels, and later I switched to a larger silver bike without training wheels. I often rode with my mother and brother in the local park, and once I crashed into a pole but only got a few scratches.

建議: Correct word choice and grammar, and organize the answer with a clear reason and an example. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “for example”. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. “people”, “bike”, “emit fumes”) and avoid vague phrases like “majority people”.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. Many people use bikes to commute short distances because they are cheap and convenient, and for example people often cycle to do shopping or visit parks. Bikes are also environmentally friendly since they don’t emit fumes like cars do.

× Yes, of course I have a bike.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'had' for past possession instead of present 'have'. Suggestion: Use past simple ('had') to match the time reference.

× When I was a child, probably when I was five, I have a pink bike with training wheels and then I got switched to another big bike that is silver that now I grew out of it.

✓ When I was a child, probably when I was five, I had a pink bike with training wheels and then I switched to a bigger silver bike that I have now outgrown.

Multiple tense and word choice issues: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'When I was a child'. 'I got switched to' is passive and awkward; use active 'I switched to' or 'I moved on to'. 'Another big bike that is silver' is awkward word order; use 'a bigger silver bike'. 'that now I grew out of it' mixes tenses and repeats pronoun 'it'; use present perfect 'I have now outgrown' or simple past 'I outgrew'. Suggestion: Keep past for childhood events and use clear active verbs and proper adjective order.

× Back then I used to go cycling in the park with my mom and my brother and I once to crash my bike into a pole.

✓ Back then I used to go cycling in the park with my mom and my brother and once I crashed my bike into a pole.

The phrase 'I once to crash' is ungrammatical. Use past simple 'I crashed' for a completed past event. Also reorder 'once' before the verb or clause: 'once I crashed' or 'I once crashed'. Suggestion: Use 'once I crashed my bike into a pole' or 'I once crashed my bike into a pole'.

× Bikes are really popular in my country because majority people use bite to commute daily when they're going shopping or going somewhere in the park and it's really convenient and it doesn't let out films that harm the environment.

✓ Bikes are really popular in my country because the majority of people use bikes to commute daily when they go shopping or go to the park; it's really convenient and doesn't emit fumes that harm the environment.

Several issues: 'majority people' needs article and preposition: 'the majority of people'. 'use bite' is a typo; should be 'use bikes'. 'when they're going shopping or going somewhere in the park' is wordy and inconsistent; use simple present for habitual actions: 'when they go shopping or go to the park'. 'it doesn't let out films' uses wrong verb and noun; correct phrase is 'doesn't emit fumes'. Also subject 'it' is vague—keep general subject 'it'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations ('majority of', 'use bikes', 'emit fumes') and present simple for habitual actions.