自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and use correct tense and concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two brief supporting details (age, who gave it, a memory). Use linking words like "and" or "so" only when needed. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and reduce grammar errors (e.g., "I had a bike when I was about five" instead of present tense).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about five. My father bought it for me as my first bike, and I remember learning to ride it in the park near our house.

建議: Answer directly and use plural agreement and smoother linking. Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and a short example. Use correct grammar ("bikes are" not "bikes is") and avoid trailing off—finish the thought. Replace fillers with linking words like "because" or "for example."

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many cities have public bike-sharing systems. For example, you can rent a bike in the city center for about $5 per 30 minutes, which makes short trips convenient and affordable.

× Uh, yes I do Umm, I do have a bike when I was around 5 that was probably the first bike that was being bought by my father.

✓ Uh, yes. I had a bike when I was around five; that was probably the first bike my father bought.

The sentence mixes present tense ('I do have') with past time reference ('when I was around 5'), which is inconsistent. Use simple past 'had' for a past state and 'bought' (simple past) for a completed past action. Also simplify wording ('that was being bought by my father' is passive and awkward) to active voice 'my father bought'. Use punctuation to separate ideas and write numbers as words for small numbers.

× Well, I do think that the bikes is very popular in my country, uh, because we have the public bike for, uh, people to rent, uh, in the city area.

✓ Well, I do think that bikes are very popular in my country because we have public bikes for people to rent in the city.

The subject 'bikes' is plural so the verb must be plural 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'the bikes' is unnecessary; use 'bikes' or 'public bikes'. 'The public bike' should be plural to match 'bikes' and 'in the city area' is more natural as 'in the city'. Remove filler words for clarity.

× And so you, you just have to pay a little, uh, probably $5 per 30 minutes and you can just.

✓ So you just have to pay a small fee, probably about $5 per 30 minutes, and you can use it.

'Pay a little' is vague; 'a small fee' is more appropriate. Add 'about' before an approximate price. The sentence was also incomplete; add 'and you can use it' to complete the idea. Use articles correctly: 'a small fee' (indefinite article for one unspecified fee).