自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify tense and nouns, reduce repetition, and make the answer concise with a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Use correct past tense for childhood and correct words (bike, not bag). For example, state that you had a bike, when you got it or who gave it to you, and mention whether you still use it now. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and avoid repeating words.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for my seventh birthday, and I still ride it occasionally for short trips around my neighborhood.

建議: Avoid filler sounds and unclear phrases. Give a clear opinion in one topic sentence, then add a specific supporting detail such as who uses bikes, when, and why. Use linking words (for example, however, because) to make your answer coherent. Be specific about age groups or occasions rather than vague times.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many families and children use them for exercise and short commutes, especially in the late afternoon when parks and bike paths are busiest.

× Yes I have a bag when it was a child a child and I am still use it that bike to this day.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I still use that bike to this day.

Problems: incorrect pronoun 'it' referring to 'a child' and wrong verb tense 'have' for past; word order and extra repetition 'a child a child'; incorrect use of 'am still use'. Suggestions: use 'had' for past possession and 'was' for 'I was a child'; connect clauses with 'and'; use 'still use' (present simple) rather than 'am still use'; place 'that bike' correctly after 'use'. Ensure pronouns clearly refer to the intended noun.

× Yes, MMM bicycle is always, umm, popular in my country. Every, every trial in the age of uh, 2:00 to 5:00.

✓ Yes, bicycles are always popular in my country. Every child aged about 2 to 5 rides them.

Problems: 'MMM bicycle is always' has singular/plural mismatch and unnatural phrasing; 'trial' is incorrect word; 'in the age of 2:00 to 5:00' mixes time format with age. Suggestions: use plural 'bicycles' and present simple 'are always popular'; replace 'trial' with 'child' or 'children' and express age as 'aged 2 to 5' or 'about 2 to 5 years old'; ensure consistent units (years, not clock times).