自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and adjective order, avoid filler words, and add one specific supporting detail. Limit to 2–3 sentences. For example, say what you liked about the bike or how you used it.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was white and black, and I used it every day to ride to my friend’s house and practice tricks in the park.

建議: Answer directly and use linking words to make the reason clear. Avoid repetition and filler words, and give a concrete example or comparison. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer trains and cars for convenience. For example, many cities have frequent trains and good road networks, so commuting by bike is less common.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Uh, it is white and black color.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Uh, it was white and black.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. The student is describing a bike they had in the past, so the verb should be past tense ('was') not present ('is'). Also 'white and black color' is unnatural and redundant; use 'white and black' or 'white-and-black' to describe the color. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use a concise adjective phrase: 'it was white and black.'

× I think bikes are not popular in my country because in my country train and the cars are popular so many people use them. Uh.

✓ I think bikes are not popular in my country because trains and cars are popular, so many people use them.

There are article and singular/plural issues. 'Train and the cars' mixes singular and plural and uses an unnecessary definite article. When speaking generally, plural forms should be used: 'trains and cars.' Remove the extra 'the' and add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and avoid unnecessary articles: 'trains and cars are popular.'