自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, grammatical, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words (e.g. because, so, but). Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (use past simple: didn’t have, asked, refused). Keep responses to no more than five sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I asked my father to buy one for me, but he refused because he thought it was unsafe. As a result, my childhood dream of riding a bike never came true, although I watched other children ride in the neighborhood.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific, relevant reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, and) and correct vocabulary (bloggers, channels, promote, modifications). Avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant words. Mention concrete facts: types of bikes, where people ride them, or popular influencers and why they matter.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use motorbikes for daily commuting because they are cheap and convenient. Also, several social media influencers and YouTube channels review bikes and post modification tutorials, which has increased interest among young people.

× No, I haven't.

✓ No, I didn't.

The question asked about a past possession ('Did you have'). The student used present perfect 'haven't' which is inappropriate. Use simple past negative 'didn't' for possession in the past. Suggestion: use 'didn't' when answering 'Did you...' questions about past events.

× I have not a bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike.

This sentence uses present tense negative form 'have not' incorrectly for past possession. The correct form is simple past negative 'didn't have'. Also word order for negation with 'do' is required for past simple.

× When I was I was a child.

✓ When I was a child.

The phrase repeats 'I was' twice, causing redundancy and incorrect sentence structure. Remove the repeated clause to form the correct temporal phrase.

× I asked my father to buy for me, but he will not accepted my offer.

✓ I asked my father to buy one for me, but he did not accept my request.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'will not accepted' mixes future 'will' with past participle 'accepted'. The action is in the past so use past simple 'did not accept'. Also use 'buy one for me' or 'buy it for me' and 'request' or 'offer' more naturally.

× Yeah, my dream, my childhood dream was when I was a child, I have a bike, but they did not agreed.

✓ Yeah, my childhood dream was that when I was a child I would have a bike, but they did not agree.

Multiple issues: tense and modal use. 'I have a bike' should be backshifted to 'I would have a bike' to express a past desire. 'They did not agreed' uses past tense auxiliary with past participle incorrectly; use past simple 'did not agree'. Also 'my dream' and 'my childhood dream' redundant; condensed for clarity.

× Yes, bye.

✓ Yes, by the way,

'Bye' is a farewell, not appropriate. Likely intended 'by' or 'yeah'. If the student meant to transition, 'by the way' fits. If just 'yes', use 'yes' alone. Use correct word choice to match meaning.

× Bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Bicycles are popular in my country.

'Bikes' is acceptable colloquially, but 'bicycles' is more formal. This is a style suggestion rather than strict grammar. No tense change needed.

× There are many, many bloggers in our country.

✓ There are many bike bloggers in our country.

The original is grammatically correct but vague. Adding 'bike' clarifies the topic. Use plural 'bloggers' appropriately; repetition 'many, many' is informal emphasis and can be reduced.

× I was on YouTube, Instagram, even Snapchat.

✓ I follow them on YouTube, Instagram, and even Snapchat.

'I was on' suggests past physical presence; for regularly watching channels or following accounts use present simple: 'I follow' or 'I watch'. Use 'and' instead of repeated commas for the final item.

× The famous, the famous one is I think UK 07, right here in our country.

✓ The most famous one, I think, is UK 07 here in our country.

Word order and redundancy issues. Place subject 'I think' as a parenthetical and correct word order 'is UK 07'. Remove repeated phrase 'the famous, the famous' and position 'here' correctly.

× Yeah, they will make blogs of bikes more expensive.

✓ Yeah, they make videos about bikes and show expensive models.

'Will make blogs of bikes more expensive' is ungrammatical and mixes ideas. If the student means bloggers feature expensive bikes, use present simple 'they make videos' or 'they post about expensive bikes'. Clarify 'blogs' to 'videos' or 'blog posts' and use correct verb forms.