自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, avoid repetition, and organise your answer with a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Mention one reason and one brief example or feeling. Use linking words (for example, so, because, which) to connect ideas and correct small grammar points (e.g., 'I really loved it' for past preference).

範例: No, I didn't. My parents couldn't afford a bike when I was young, so I usually walked to school. I enjoyed walking because it gave me time to chat with neighbours and get some fresh air.

建議: Avoid repeating the same word and give one or two specific reasons with a linking phrase. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add specific details or an example. Remove filler words like 'OK' and repeat only necessary adjectives. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'affordable', 'practical', 'useful in traffic').

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. They are affordable and practical for short trips, and many people prefer them to avoid heavy traffic during rush hour.

× No I didn't. My parents couldn't afford it when I was young, that's why my transportation back then was walking and I really love it since I have time to talk with my neighbors while walking while walking.

✓ No, I didn't. My parents couldn't afford one when I was young, so my transportation back then was walking, and I really loved it because I had time to talk with my neighbors while walking.

Errors: inconsistent past tense (mixes past and present), repetition ('while walking' twice), and article choice ('a bike' -> 'one') and conjunction use. Explanation: The question asks about the past, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'I really loved' and 'I had time' match 'I didn't' and 'couldn't afford'. Use 'one' or 'a bike' instead of repeating 'it'. Replace 'that's why' with 'so' for concise cause. Remove duplicate phrase. Suggestion: Keep all verbs referring to past events in past tense and avoid repeated phrases.

× Yes, because many people use this as their transportation because it is very convenient, very cheap and very convenient, especially when there's a traffic, OK.

✓ Yes, because many people use bikes as transportation; they are convenient, cheap, and especially useful in traffic.

Errors: unclear pronoun reference ('this' ambiguous), repetition ('very convenient' twice), article and noun use ('a traffic' incorrect). Explanation: Use the noun 'bikes' instead of 'this' for clarity. Avoid repeating the same adjective. Use 'traffic' without an article and state characteristics concisely. Suggestion: Refer directly to the noun, avoid repetition, and use 'traffic' without 'a'.