自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and coherence: use past tense consistently, start with a clear topic sentence, and give concise supporting details using linking words. Keep to 2–4 sentences, avoid repetition, and clarify the event and how you won the bike.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a prize from a school event because I entered a game where we threw paper into a box, and one winner was chosen during the assembly. I remember feeling very proud to win it.

建議: Make the answer more structured and specific: begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, and, moreover). Use correct article and plural forms and avoid vague phrases.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas and in cities like Taipei. For example, the local government provides bike lanes and convenient parking, so it is both safe and easy to ride. Moreover, bike-sharing programs make bicycles readily available for short trips.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and the bike is the school's reward because I invite I attend the event and you need to throw the walls paper into the box and during the meeting they will pick one and you will win the reward.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; the bike was a school reward because I entered an event where you had to throw a piece of wall paper into a box, and during the meeting they picked one winner who won the prize.

Multiple past-tense actions are described but the student used present tense 'have' and inconsistent tenses. Use past simple ('had', 'was', 'entered', 'picked', 'won') for completed events in the past. Also clarity fixes: 'entered an event' instead of 'invite I attend', 'piece of wall paper' and 'prize' instead of 'reward' improves naturalness.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and the bike is the school's reward because I invite I attend the event and you need to throw the walls paper into the box and during the meeting they will pick one and you will win the reward.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; the bike was a school reward because I entered an event where participants had to throw a piece of wall paper into a box, and during the meeting they picked one person who won the prize.

The original uses 'you' and 'I' inconsistently and 'I invite I attend' is ungrammatical. Replace with clear, consistent subjects: 'I entered' and 'participants had to' or 'they picked one person'. This keeps pronoun reference clear.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and the bike is the school's reward because I invite I attend the event and you need to throw the walls paper into the box and during the meeting they will pick one and you will win the reward.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; the bike was a school reward because I entered an event where you had to throw a piece of wall paper into a box, and during the meeting they picked one winner who won the prize.

Prepositions like 'into the box' are fine but 'throw the walls paper' is incorrect; use 'a piece of wall paper into a box'. Also 'during the meeting they will pick one' should be past tense and 'pick one winner' is clearer.

× In my country, the bicycle is a popular vehicle in the countryside and some city like the Taipei, they have some policy about the bicycle rider so it's easy to find.

✓ In my country, bicycles are popular in the countryside and in some cities like Taipei; they have policies about cyclists, so it is easy to find bicycles.

General statements about current habits should use simple present, but number agreement matters: use plural 'bicycles are' and 'cities'. Also 'the Taipei' is incorrect; use 'Taipei' without an article. 'Policy about the bicycle rider' is awkward; 'policies about cyclists' is natural.

× In my country, the bicycle is a popular vehicle in the countryside and some city like the Taipei, they have some policy about the bicycle rider so it's easy to find.

✓ In my country, bicycles are popular in the countryside and in some cities like Taipei; they have policies about cyclists, so it is easy to find places to park and ride them.

Article errors: 'the bicycle is a popular vehicle' should be plural or use 'the bicycle is a popular means of transport' but plural sounds more natural. 'the Taipei' wrongly uses definite article; remove 'the'. Also clarify 'parking lot and ride it on' to 'places to park and ride them'.

× It's easy and safe to find the parking lot and ride it on.

✓ It is easy and safe to find parking and to ride a bicycle.

Adverb placement and phrasing are awkward. 'Find the parking lot and ride it on' is not natural English. Use parallel infinitives 'to find parking and to ride a bicycle' and remove unnecessary 'on'.