自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (past tense, subject–verb agreement) and avoid repetition and filler sounds (uh).

範例: Yes, I didn’t own a bike as a child, but my parents had one so I often rode with my father. For example, he taught me how to balance and steer in our neighborhood park, which I enjoyed because the open space made learning easier.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, moreover). Use correct noun–verb agreement and more precise vocabulary (affordable, convenient, fuel-efficient, suitable for deliveries). Remove fillers and redundant phrases.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and economical for many people. Moreover, they are convenient for short trips and small deliveries, especially in crowded city areas where cars cannot go easily.

× Yes, no, I don't have a bike when I was a child but my parents have it so I ride with my father when I was a child and I used to learn bike from my father and I like to bite very much because it have open surrounding uh conditions, so I like it.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my parents did, so I used to ride with my father. I learned to ride a bike from him, and I like bikes very much because they have open surroundings and are convenient, so I like them.

The student mixes present and past tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. Change 'don't have' to past 'didn't have' and 'have it' to 'did' for past reference. Use 'used to ride' and 'learned' for habitual past actions. 'Bite' is a misspelling of 'bike' and 'it have' should be 'they have' because 'bikes' is plural. Also change 'open surrounding uh conditions' to a clearer phrase 'open surroundings' and make pronouns consistent. Improve sentence flow by splitting into shorter sentences.

× Yes, according to bikes are very popular in my country because bikes is that the type of transportation which is affordable uh for uh all people, because it's good delivery range and it's good in price and it helps us to move in any place and helps to load the goods.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are a type of transportation that is affordable for everyone. They have a good range, are inexpensive, help us get around, and can carry goods.

The student uses singular verbs with plural nouns ('bikes is') and repeats awkward phrasing. Change 'bikes is' to 'they are' and 'that the type' to 'a type'. Replace informal fillers and unclear phrases ('good in price', 'move in any place') with clearer expressions: 'inexpensive', 'get around', and 'carry goods'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and plural pronoun use for 'bikes'.