自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and contradictory statements (you first say you can't ride, then that you will try). Use precise vocabulary and keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I still can't ride a bicycle, but I plan to learn this year because cycling is a convenient way to avoid traffic in my city. If I learn, I hope to use it for short trips and exercise.

建議: Answer directly and support with clear reasons and one specific example. Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and correct vocabulary (bike lanes, crowded). Remove filler words and unclear phrases like "in the kernel." Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: No, bikes are not very popular in my city because we lack dedicated bike lanes and the streets are crowded with cars. As a result, many people avoid cycling for safety reasons, so most travel by bus or motorcycle instead.

× No, I actually didn't have a bike when I was a child Uh, actually I don't I can't, I ride a bike even now, so I'm, I have vision that I will try this year. I think because, uh, you know a lot of traffic it's very good way to transport. I so.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Actually I still don't; I can't ride a bike even now, but I plan to try this year because, you know, with a lot of traffic it is a very good way to get around.

The original sentence mixes past and present awkwardly and uses incorrect verb forms. 'I actually didn't have' is fine for past, but the following clauses 'I don't I can't, I ride a bike even now' are confusing and tense-inconsistent. Use 'I still don't; I can't ride a bike even now' to show present inability. 'I have vision that I will try' is unnatural; use 'I plan to try' for future intention. 'It's very good way to transport' lacks an article and natural verb; use 'it is a very good way to get around.' Suggest breaking into shorter sentences and keeping tense consistency: past for childhood, present for current ability, and future for plans.

× It's not actually in, umm, actually it's not popular in my country because we don't have, uh, bicycle Rd. in my city.

✓ It's not actually popular in my country because we don't have bicycle lanes in my city.

The phrase 'bicycle Rd.' is incorrect and unclear; the correct term is 'bicycle lanes' or 'bike lanes.' The extra 'in' after 'actually' is unnecessary. Use plural 'lanes' if referring to multiple or the general absence of such infrastructure. Removing redundant words makes the sentence clearer.

× So it's actually very hard to ride in the city because, uh, the people are, I think, in the, uh, kernel.

✓ So it's actually very hard to ride in the city because people, I think, drive too close to cyclists.

'The people are... in the kernel' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely the speaker meant drivers crowd cyclists or drive dangerously. Rephrase to a clear clause describing the problem: 'people drive too close to cyclists.' This fixes sentence structure and conveys the intended meaning.