自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, use correct tense and avoid contradictions. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use past simple consistently and correct articles. Limit to 2–3 sentences. Example fixes: “I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I remember, however, that I had a very small but pretty bicycle that I liked to ride around the neighborhood.”

範例: I didn’t have a bike when I was very young. Later, I had a small, pretty bicycle that I enjoyed riding around my street with my friends.

建議: Be concise and accurate with grammar and vocabulary. Start with a clear opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Fix plural and article errors and use precise phrases (e.g., ‘traffic congestion’, ‘shorter journeys’). Avoid wordy or unclear phrases. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because traffic congestion is getting worse. As a result, many people prefer bikes for short journeys since they are faster and cheaper than cars.

× Well, if I talk about myself in my childhood, I don't have any bike, but I remember I have a very beautiful small bicycle.

✓ Well, if I talk about myself in my childhood, I didn't have any bike, but I remember I had a very beautiful small bicycle.

The sentence mixes present tense (do/remember I have) with past time reference 'in my childhood'. Use past tense for actions and states in the past: 'didn't have' and 'had'. Suggestion: keep all verbs that refer to childhood in simple past.

× Definitely, I think bikes are very common in our country, almost all person have their individual bike to ride because the traffic are increasingly day by day.

✓ Definitely, I think bikes are very common in our country; almost all people have their own bikes to ride because traffic is increasing day by day.

Several errors: 'person' should be plural 'people' (singular/plural issue); 'have' with 'all people' is correct but context had other issues; 'their individual bike' is awkward—use 'their own bikes' to match plural owners and plural possessions; 'traffic are' is subject-verb agreement but categorized under singular/plural issue here—use 'traffic is increasing'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural nouns and verbs, and use 'own' for possession.

× So that's why instead people using car for their writing, they mostly prefer to use bikes at that time to short their.

✓ So that's why, instead of people using cars for their commuting, they mostly prefer to use bikes at that time to shorten their travel time.

Multiple preposition errors: 'instead people' should be 'instead of people'; 'using car' needs plural 'cars' and 'for their writing' is wrong preposition and word choice—likely meant 'for their commuting' or 'for their commute'; 'to short their' is incorrect—use 'to shorten their travel time'. Suggestion: use 'instead of' to show contrast, pluralize countable nouns, and choose correct verbs/nouns for context (commute, shorten travel time).