自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise, correct grammar, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why you didn’t ride it using correct tense and phrasing. Use a linking word to connect the reason and the outcome.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I rarely rode it because I was afraid of falling since I hadn’t practised. As a result, my parents eventually gave it to a neighbour’s child who used it more often.

建議: This is a good, direct answer. Improve it by tightening language, using one linking word, and adding a specific example or brief comparison to show wider knowledge. Avoid small inaccuracies (e.g., 'commute to school or walk' — use 'commute to school or work').

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they’re cheap and convenient. For example, many students and office workers cycle to college or work every day, especially in smaller cities where traffic and parking are difficult.

× I had a bike when I was a child, actually, but I never rode it because I'm afraid I'd fail off since I didn't use it.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, actually, but I never rode it because I was afraid I would fall off since I didn't use it.

The original uses 'I'm afraid I'd fail off' which mixes present contraction 'I'm' with a past context and uses incorrect verb 'fail off'. Correct form is 'I was afraid I would fall off.' Use past tense 'was' to match the past time frame (when I was a child) and use the correct phrasal verb 'fall off' meaning to come off the bike. Also expand contracted conditional to 'would' for clarity in past reference. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense for feelings about past events and use the correct verb phrase 'fall off.'

× My parents eventually gave it away to a neighbor's child.

✓ My parents eventually gave it away to a neighbor's child.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; however, more natural phrasing could be 'gave it to a neighbor's child' or 'gave it away to a neighbor's child.' Both are correct. No change required but be aware that 'give away' emphasizes disposal or gifting without return.

× Oh yes, bicycles are very popular in my country.

✓ Oh yes, bicycles are very popular in my country.

This sentence is correct. It uses present simple appropriately to express a general fact. No correction needed.

× Riding a bike is a common way to commute to school or walk because it's cheap and convenient, and many of my classmates cycle to college every day.

✓ Riding a bike is a common way to commute to school or work because it's cheap and convenient, and many of my classmates cycle to college every day.

The original uses 'commute to school or walk' which is confusing: 'walk' does not parallel 'commute to' and seems unintended. Likely intended 'work' rather than 'walk.' Replace with 'work' to create a parallel structure: 'commute to school or work.' Also 'cycle to college' is fine. Suggestion: Keep parallel structure when listing similar actions and choose the correct word ('work' rather than 'walk') to match context.