自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your response more natural and grammatically accurate by using correct verb forms and concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, 'every day' or 'because'). Avoid redundancy (e.g., '30 minutes later' and 'came back' together) and incorrect words ('constantly' used awkwardly).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it every morning for about 30 minutes, which helped me stay healthy. Because I was consistent with this routine, my mother was proud of me.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear, relevant supporting details. Remove hesitations and incorrect or irrelevant words ('cannabis clubs' is inappropriate here). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' and be specific (mention types of cycling activity, reasons for popularity, or where people ride). Keep it concise and grammatically correct.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, there are many amateur cycling clubs and weekend group rides, and people often use bicycles for short journeys in cities because they are cheap and convenient.

× I really like to riding my bike.

✓ I really like riding my bike.

The verb 'like' can be followed by a gerund (verb+ing) or an infinitive, but not the combination 'to' + gerund. Use 'like riding' or 'to ride'. Suggestion: say 'I really like riding my bike.'

× Every morning I went outside and I'll ride my bike and I came back after 30 minutes later and my mom really felt proud of me because I did something very constantly and it was really helpful for my health too.

✓ Every morning I went outside and rode my bike, and I came back after 30 minutes, and my mom felt proud of me because I did it regularly; it was really helpful for my health too.

Multiple tense and word-choice problems: 'I'll ride' is future and inconsistent with past context, so use past tense 'rode'. 'Came back after 30 minutes later' is redundant; use 'came back after 30 minutes' or '30 minutes later.' 'Really felt proud' can be simplified to 'felt proud.' 'Did something very constantly' is unnatural; use 'did it regularly' or 'consistently.' Also join clauses with commas or conjunctions for clarity. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout and use natural adverbs like 'regularly.'

× Yes, of course it's very popular because there are many amateur clubs riding bikes and I don't umm, join the cannabis clubs, but I definitely see a lot of people enjoy riding their bikes and it's really big market and.

✓ Yes, of course it's very popular because there are many amateur cycling clubs, and I don't join the commuting clubs, but I definitely see a lot of people enjoying riding their bikes, and it's a really big market.

Multiple issues: 'amateur clubs riding bikes' is better as 'amateur cycling clubs.' The phrase 'I don't umm, join the cannabis clubs' contains an incorrect and inappropriate word 'cannabis'; likely intended 'cycling' or 'commuting' — here 'commuting clubs' or simply omit; corrected to 'commuting clubs.' 'See a lot of people enjoy' should be 'see a lot of people enjoying' (verb+ing after 'see' for ongoing action) or 'see that a lot of people enjoy.' 'It's really big market' needs an article: 'it's a really big market.' Also remove trailing 'and.' Suggestion: use clear nouns, correct participle forms after 'see,' and include articles where needed.