自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers and repetitions. For example, say you had a bike, explain briefly why you couldn’t ride it outside (who set the rule and the reason), and finish with a short comment about how that affected you.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child, but my father wouldn’t let me ride it outside because he was worried I might get bruised or scarred. As a result, I mostly practised riding in our yard, so I became confident but not used to cycling on the road.

建議: Make the answer more natural and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words to connect your points and correct grammar (e.g., 'cheap and convenient' → 'cheap and convenient transportation'). Mention who uses bikes or where they are popular to add detail.

範例: Yes, absolutely. Bicycles are a common mode of transportation in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For instance, many students and delivery workers use bikes in cities to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes I definitely have I had a bike before but or however my dad didn't allow me to use it outside because it might cause bruising that leaves that leaves as scars so.

✓ Yes, I definitely had a bike before, but my dad didn't allow me to use it outside because he thought it might cause bruises that could leave scars.

The student mixed present and past tenses ('have' with 'had') and used awkward phrasing. Use past tense consistently for a past situation ('I had'). 'Might cause bruising that leaves that leaves as scars' is ungrammatical and repetitive; replace with 'might cause bruises that could leave scars.' Also remove filler words ('or however', 'so') to make the sentence clear and cohesive. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid repetition; use 'thought' to report the father's belief.

× Yes, absolutely. In my country bicycles are widely used as mode of transportation as it gives cheap and convenient.

✓ Yes, absolutely. In my country, bicycles are widely used as a mode of transportation because they are cheap and convenient.

The original has quantifier and article errors: 'as mode of transportation' needs the article 'a mode of transportation.' 'It gives cheap and convenient' is incorrect: 'it' should agree with plural 'bicycles' and the nouns/adjectives are misused. Use 'they are cheap and convenient' to describe bicycles. Also use 'because' to express reason. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use correct articles and adjective-noun order ('cheap and convenient' modify bicycles).