自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify meaning, use correct tense and grammar, be concise, and add one or two specific details. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain reasons using linking words. Avoid irrelevant or confusing statements (e.g., 'gets deported') unless you mean it and can explain. Use simpler, correct structures: past tense for past situations and clearer verbs.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school or sometimes took a taxi. Also, I never learned to ride a bicycle, which is why I never owned one.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Improve grammar (subject–verb agreement) and avoid filler sounds. Give one or two concrete examples or comparisons (e.g., car ownership, public transport). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars or motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for long distances. Also, good public transport in some cities makes cycling less common.

× I didn't have any because my family gets deported.

✓ I didn't have one because my family was deported.

The speaker refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Gets deported' is present simple and incorrect for a past event; use 'was deported'. Also 'any' is vague for 'a bike' so use 'one' to refer back to 'a bike'. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past events and use clear reference words like 'one' for countable items.

× At the same time, I don't know how to ride a bicycle, so I just walk around the house going to school by walking or taking a cab.

✓ At that time, I didn't know how to ride a bicycle, so I walked to school or took a cab.

The context is childhood (past), so verbs must be in past tense rather than present ('don't know', 'walk'). Also 'walk around the house going to school by walking' is redundant and awkward; simplify to 'walked to school'. Use consistent past tense for events in the same time frame.

× MMM in my country bikes is not kind of popular because most of the time people walk around or they have their own vehicle that they can ride to somewhere they want to go.

✓ In my country, bikes are not very popular because most of the time people walk or they have their own vehicles to drive where they want to go.

Subject 'bikes' is plural so the verb must be plural 'are' not 'is'. 'Not kind of popular' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'not very popular'. 'Vehicle' should be plural 'vehicles' to agree with 'people', and 'ride to somewhere they want to go' is awkward—use 'drive where they want to go' or 'ride to the places they want to go'. Also streamline 'walk around' to 'walk' when referring to travel.