自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid fillers and repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a green bike when I was a child and I rode it to school almost every day. I often rode with my grandmother, which made those mornings feel special and cheerful. Because of those memories, I sometimes wish I could go back to my childhood.

建議: Answer directly, use clear linking words and more precise vocabulary. State your opinion first, then give 1–2 specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and correct word order and phrasing.

範例: Not particularly. In many Chinese cities people prefer subways, buses and taxis because they are faster and more convenient. As a result, bicycles are mainly used for short trips or leisure rather than daily commuting in big cities.

× Absolutely. I have, uh, a green bike when I child and when I go into school I ride a bike and with my grandma, uh, I, I think that's a really unhappy time to me and I really want to return my childhood.

✓ Absolutely. I had a green bike when I was a child, and when I went to school I rode it. I used to go with my grandma. I think that was a very happy time for me, and I really want to return to my childhood.

Errors: incorrect tense ('have' should be past 'had' for a past situation), missing auxiliary and subject in 'when I child' (should be 'when I was a child'), inconsistent tense in later clauses ('go' and 'ride' should be past 'went' and 'rode'), awkward phrasing 'and with my grandma' (split into a separate sentence with subject), incorrect adjective choice 'unhappy' vs intended 'happy', and missing preposition 'to' in 'return to my childhood'. Suggestions: Use past tense consistently for past experiences, include the verb 'was' for age phrases, use pronouns or referents (ride it), split ideas into clear sentences, choose correct adjectives that convey meaning, and use correct prepositions like 'return to'.

× Umm, not really, cause in China we have some more convenience, umm, convenience, uh, ways to uh, transportation like subway or taxi or cars and a bike. Just really slow.

✓ Umm, not really, because in China we have more convenient ways of transportation, such as the subway, taxis, and cars, and bikes are just really slow.

Errors: informal 'cause' should be 'because', incorrect comparative/adjective 'some more convenience' should be 'more convenient', wrong preposition 'ways to transportation' should be 'ways of transportation' or 'ways to get around', list punctuation and noun plurality ('taxi or cars' inconsistent; use 'taxis and cars'), sentence fragment 'Just really slow' lacks subject (make 'bikes are just really slow'). Suggestions: Use 'because' in formal answers, choose correct adjective forms ('convenient'), use correct prepositions ('ways of transportation' or 'ways to get around'), make lists parallel and plural as needed, and avoid sentence fragments by supplying subjects and verbs.