自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid repetition, and limit to around 2–3 sentences. Add one specific detail (when/where or what you liked) and use a linking word if you expand. For example, correct verb forms: “I had a bike” and “I rode it every week.”

範例: I had a bike when I was a child, and I rode it almost every week. For example, I used to cycle to the park with my friends on Saturday mornings, which helped me stay active and have fun.

建議: Make your response clearer and more organized. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and unclear names; if you mention events, describe them briefly and accurately. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, at my school we have a cycling event around Hainan called the “Bike Lane Tour,” which attracts many students and shows how common cycling is here.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and I regularly ride my bike every every week.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I regularly rode my bike every week.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' and 'ride' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense for actions that occurred in the past: 'had' and 'rode'. Also remove the duplicated word 'every'. Suggestion: keep a consistent past tense narrative and proofread for repeated words.

× Yes, I think by guess particular in our country because umm, it is also popular in our school.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because they are also popular in our schools.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing 'by guess particular' and uses singular 'it' for the plural noun 'bikes'. Use present simple for a general opinion: 'I think bikes are popular'. Replace 'it' with 'they' to agree with the plural subject, and pluralize 'school' if referring generally to schools. Suggestion: use clear, simple structures for opinions and ensure pronoun-number agreement.

× In our school we have an activity which is called umm Bicolene surrounded umm around at Hainan and all of the great.

✓ In our school we have an activity called Bicolene that takes place around Hainan and is very popular.

The original is disfluent and ungrammatical: extra filler words 'umm', awkward verb 'surrounded around', and unclear ending 'and all of the great'. Use a concise relative clause 'called Bicolene' and a clear verb phrase 'takes place around Hainan'. Replace vague phrase 'and all of the great' with a clear adjective like 'very popular' if that was intended. Suggestion: remove fillers, use precise verbs, and complete ideas logically.